User talk:Ejd2012/sandbox

Your wikipage is well written, intelligible, and to the point. You did a great job at focusing on the important facts and making them clear to the reader. I have two minor critiques. The first being that the layout could flow better. I think you can put early career and later career together. There doesn’t seems to be a real need to have them separated since Dale is still contributing to her career. Also, although it is clear Dale and Cole worked as a team, too much focus is put towards the work they did together rather than the work Dale did during her career. An example of this is at the start of the Later Career subsection when it states, “Later in their careers.” More emphasis should be put towards Dale since it’s her page. Other than that, not much else to critique on. It is a concise article and very easy to understand. Awesome work. --Marliethefilmcritic (talk) 20:14, 31 October 2018 (UTC)Marliethefilmcritic