User talk:DrakeS/Draft

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@DrakeS, Emmett121, and JaminB: Nice work on your draft.

• You rely rather heavily on an article from 2003. The preference is for sources that are no more than five years old - this one is 15. A lot can change in how we understand the brain and treat disease since the early 2000s. You need to rely on more recent sources
• Your last two references aren't real references - they're search results from a subscription-only database. You need to use properly-formatted references, which you can create using DOIs and the cite tool.
• References go before after punctuation, not before.
• Avoid writing in the style of a journal. For example, something like this isn't encyclopedia-like in style, it's written from the perspective of someone who is making these observations.

Some improvement can be seen within a year for those with mild impairments, but can take much longer in those with higher severity damage

• Make sure that what you say can be supported by the source you're citing. For example, you wrote

Excessive drinking costs the US approximately $250 billion in 2010^[4] and has been increasing since.

The only reference after this statement in the paragraph is the same ref [4], a source entitled "2010 National and State Costs of Excessive Alcohol Consumption". While it's possible that the source comments on changes since 2010, the abstract doesn't mention post-2010 developments. So double-check that your sources support what's said. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 22:44, 4 April 2018 (UTC)

I think Ian meant references after punctuation. MMBiology (talk) 23:02, 4 April 2018 (UTC)