Djansen15

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I appreciate the changes that you made highlighting the circumstances woman face when going against social norms. This was a great addition to the article.Samjam830 (talk) 20:48, 12 September 2014 (UTC)

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Hi DJ15, Thanks for your work so far. I love the idea of editing the At-risk students article, particularly exploring how educational systems handle this idea globally. The dropout rate is far higher in the Global South, as kids have to go out to work. It would be interesting to see how the term "at risk" is defined globally. Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 22:49, 10 September 2014 (UTC)

Awesome Idea

I love your idea of working on the At-risk students page and also subject a global context, I would love to know how at risk children are defined around the world, and how it compares to the idea of american at risk youth .MaScott14 (talk) 21:47, 14 September 2014 (UTC)

I agree!

I hear you on the subject being something that is personally related, both my brother and I were considered at-risk and taking psychology courses it is very strange to hear your childhood talked about in such a detached manner. I'm sure the page can use more up to date data concerning how many youth exactly are at-risk and programs designed to help. Good luck!

Zombiesatemyneighbors (talk) 14:51, 15 September 2014 (UTC)--

Building the proposal

Hi, Djansen15 - I am glad you've chosen this article. I would like to know more details about the kinds of changes you plan to make and what examples you will build from the global south. Much of the article is in list form. Will you do any re-organizational work on the article? I encourage you to add detail and revise the proposal after you locate your sources. The time has come to search and identify the library resources you will use to make this happen. I look forward to seeing where you will go. Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 21:51, 30 September 2014 (UTC)

A kitten for you!

DJ15 - Congratulations on getting your proposal and sources started! I look forward to talking to you about them this week. I share your concern about the lack of global sources. Is the paper on Mexico peer reviewed or from a valid source by WP standards? To prep for the meeting this week, I would recommend two steps. First, keep looking for global sources. Second, check out the articles you have. Make an outline of the information you will incorporate from them. That way, we can get the most our of our work together this week. You're doing a great job - keep it up!

Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 16:13, 4 October 2014 (UTC)

Sandbox feedback

Can the term at-risk student be applied or has it been applied to other countries? Right now, your article is only about US at-risk students.

What kinds of differences are there between at-risk students and at-risk youth? To me, the 'student' is at risk for doing poorly academically but an at-risk youth is at risk for additional things. Working to describe the relationship/connection between the two may be helpful.

A lot of your article is dealing with the United States. Can you find ways to incorporate other countries into the page?

I like that you've included a history of the term, but I am unsure if the last paragraph in the section fits here. Could you think of a way to integrate the paragraph into a different section or frame the last paragraph in a more historical context?

There are a few moments in the article, too, where it can get repetitive. I would recommend reading through the article again and pulling out lines that you've already said. If they're in several spots, it may be a sign that they belong in the lead-in section.

All of the citations from your causes section come from the same source. I would look in to trying to diversify the citations in this section, just to lend the causes more credibility. — Preceding unsigned comment added by AbbeyMaynard (talk • contribs) 17:55, 28 October 2014 (UTC)