User talk:Claireneal/History of Waste Management

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Brendankarch

You have an excellent start here. Are you going to remain focused on the two cases of Syria and Romans or expand? You might consider ways to connect them with topic sentences like 'Archaeological and other evidence reveals ancient societies developed sophisticated waste management systems, particularly for human waste...' Think about how to tie together your various facts into an overarching picture. Also, you do use repetitive language sometimes (ex. 'There is evidence...') Can you find ways to vary it? But very good work overall so far! Brendankarch (talk) 14:55, 31 March 2021 (UTC)Reply