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Caleb's peer review

The point of this article is made clear within the first sentence, giving a brief description of the artist and what kind of art they create. The only issue that I found grammatically with this section is the word "abstractpaitnings" is not separated, but that was probably due to the article being copied and pasted. The Early life and Education section gives accurate information about the life and education of Mehretu based on the links given. I would change the location of some of the citations and move them from being clustered at the end of the sentences, and have them spread across relative to the information that it belongs to in the sentences. In the Career section of the article I did not find any outstanding grammatical errors, and there is a variation of sources just in this paragraph alone. Each section thus far also does not have any sort of conclusion made apparent, allowing for more information to be added as needed in the future. The Residency, 2000's and 2010's sections seem to be left alone for the time being due to this being a rough draft of the article. The Recognition, Collections and Exhibitions articles are also left alone, in the nature that the whole article was not going to be drafted by our initial deadline. While looking at the way that the article originally has the Exhibitions section labeled, there may be a way that you can better format this section to take up less space in your future drafts by possible adding some kind of table system that will hold all of this information and possibly make it more identifiable and seem less lengthy. In the changes that were made to the Art Market section, I did not find any grammatical errors or issues with any of the sources that I looked at. The article on Julie Mehretu does not have any obvious bias towards the artist's work by the editor or any of the information about the artist's life or work. I did not find anything that suggested bias from Julie Mehretu's point of view either, and anything that was taken directly from Julie Mehretu's dialogue was properly quoted and cited, such as in the Career section. There was not many blatant grammatical errors, aside from that that I found in the first sentence where the two words "abstract painting" connected with one another. The structure of the article itself flows well and stays true to most other articles I have read on artists, contemporary or not. It has a good flow from their an overview of their life, career, style of artwork and exhibitions that Mehretu has taken part in, all the way up to certain pieces of work being sold. None of the sections have to little or too much information presented, they allow the information to be given to the person viewing the article without allowing for congestion of certain areas. The only note that I had for this was the possible formatting of the exhibitions that Mehretu has had during her career. The editor does not try to conclude any of the sections of the article, or even try to wrap up all of the information at the end which is good for the longevity of the article.Culrich115 (talk) 17:44, 7 March 2019 (UTC)

Caleb's Peer Review

The introduction of the article is clear and is direct by providing a description of the artist and her work. The draft is very well organized through the indication of what is originally part of the article and what is being added. From reading over the article all the information seems to be relevant and does not provide any bias. None of the information appears to be over represented in any way. Each section is clearly labeled and provides an excellent amount of information. All of the reference links listed work properly and support the article. The sources are appropriately added where information from the source is used. The sources seem to be reliable and not biased. The only grammatical error I found is in the first sentence, there is not a space between abstract paintings. Overall everything looks great and seems to be right on track. Cjames120 (talk) 18:41, 7 March 2019 (UTC)