User talk:Angb2015/Autism therapies

Hi, Overall I think your draft is very well done. I believe it is very neutral and I did not find any bias which is important when posting on Wiki. I think maybe you could expand a little more on the different therapies and why they are the best for Autism. As for grammar, I did not find many mistakes maybe just a comma after "lastly". I also found your sources to be very credible. -delaney555

Hello! I like that you added a brief description of autism to the lead section, when reading the original article, I thought that would be helpful! One suggestion I have is to make sure you are only capitalizing things that need to be capitalized, including autism and certain types of therapies. I also think it would be helpful if you copy and pasted some old the original text from the article before and after your contributions so reviewers could see where in the article your suggestions would be added to. I like your overview of the 4 therapies you addressed, but I would suggest some minor grammar edits. For the sentence about occupational therapy, I think it should be "behavior, whereas occupational..." or you could eliminate "whereas" altogether. I would also recommend looking at some published journal articles to help with the strength of your sources, and don't forget to add them in with the in-text citation. Good job, overall! — Preceding unsigned comment added by MadeleineMarieC (talk • contribs) 23:05, 2 October 2021 (UTC)