User talk:Amohamed7/sandbox

Drosophila Group

You need to any more information to the life cycle and fertilization sections. You need more citations in general and also more within the article. Some of the citations within the article doesn't work. You also need to italicize the organisms. Everything needs to be proofread and checked for grammatical errors.

Lead section- 1.5, your article needs more information about the overview of the topic. Body paragraphs- 14 or 15, gastrulation is good, but other sections need work. They need more information added to each section. Style- 1.5 or 2, all of the style is good besides that the coverage of topics is not balanced. Citations- 1 because you have less than 12 citations for your article.

kim_radford

"Cleavage continues and around the 32 cell stage, the formation of the blastocoel is observed, the blastocoel is a cavity that forms in the Animal hemisphere." would better as two separate sentences, "is observed. The blastocoel ..."

Great style, great length, good grammar, great content! Well done. My eyes were happy to read. Love the bolded and hyperlinked content. As well as the referenced example. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Kim radford (talk • contribs) 15:37, 28 March 2018 (UTC)