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Lead edit
The lead is still pretty underdeveloped. It should reflect the full contents of the article, alluding to all sections. As such there are no references to security theater's potential benefits, drawbacks, etymology, etc. This needs expansion.
Content edit
The content you've added is good. Why have you not engaged with Simone Browne, though? Where's the information from her book that we read?
Tone and Balance edit
This is good, considering that the topic of the article is already a critical term that proponents of security measures would dismiss.
Sources and References edit
Again, overlooking Browne seems like a huge oversight.
Be sure to fix those "citation needed" tags.
Organization edit
I'm not sure this organization works as is. It might make more sense to start with the etymology -- the term "security theater" is not a neutral one, so where did it come from? Who coined it and why? Then move into examples. De-listify the ones given. Just mention that critics include several practices in security theater, then talk about them. After this, I'd go with benefits. Say something to the effect that even if all this stuff is just theater, some analysis say it's worthwhile, and say why. Then go with the drawbacks, which is the longest part of the article.
Images and Media edit
Should be pretty straightforward to find some images and add them. There should be free-use images of airport security lines out there, provided by the Federal government themselves, probably (and therefore public domain).
Overall impressions edit
Over all, the article could still use a lot of work. Your contributions are sound, but the rest of the article devolves quickly into a long list. You should focus on the things I mention in this review for an A, but additional cleanup will push you into the A+ range. Abukun (talk) 19:30, 12 December 2023 (UTC)