User talk:AlanNavai/sandbox

Lead Paragraph

The opening sentence sheds light on what the Nimbus Fish Hatchery is, but does not cover all of what you are trying to convey. Try adding in some points about the construction, or the operation itself to better introduce the topic.

Structure

Your article structure so far is quite well done. I believe that you can add certain sections as subsections under larger topics. Such as breaking up operations and history; because you have some convoluting facts. Though your sections are broken up; try reviewing the facts to put them under the correct heading.

Balance

Surprisingly, your article is well balanced.

Neutrality

This is written in a neutral voice. Well Done.

Reliability

Sources are reliable and cited correctly, besides the last few sections which need some work.

Peer Review Response: Hunter Peoples

Alan, Thanks for all the insight and the suggestions for my article. Obviously the article is not completed yet so I will do my best to fill content gaps. This article is not brand-new, so it does have an existing article with an introductory paragraph. I am beginning my writing at the end of that paragraph and adding on from there. Sorry if that caused some confusion. As you said, it can be difficult to find information about these kinds of topics (and it is), but I will continue to dig deep into the web to find sources and find hard sources (books, journals, etc) to add to my article. I will also make sure that no one section is larger than the other. Hpeoples98 (talk) 04:31, 30 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review Response from Daniel

Thank Alan for your review. These are tips that I will take into consideration when finishing the final product. Adding more sources is a necessity when for the final product. I need to make sure that sections do not overpower each other. There is a still a lot that needs to be done. Danielnunez 9386 (talk) 11:34, 31 March 2019 (UTC)