Villamar831

About me

Hello! I am currently a running start student at EVCC. I love hanging out at the beach during my free time, it's peaceful. I lived in California most of my life; I moved to Washington with my little sister and my mom. My parents are divorced and I haven't seen my dad since. My favorite sport is basketball, before moving to the state of Washington I played for a team called the Falcon Eagles. My biggest motivation and inspiration is my mother. She is very hardworking and always has the strength to keep moving forward even after all of the obstacles encountered. It is honestly hard to fill up at least a decent amount of space. I am all out!

I would like to learn more about Wikipedia how it is actually used; and why people use it. Is Wikipedia really the main website that people tend to go first? Why are teachers always discussing Wikipedia? What are the pros and cons of this website... It's like a midnight thought?! Anyways thank you for viewing my page. Hope to be back soon! I'd love to learn more about Wikipedia and its usage.

Article Evaluation

   I chose to write about racism in the USA. Coming from an immigrant family and having to deal with racism very often, gives me the intrigue to do research about other people's experiences or thoughts on this topic. I visited the "Racial Discrimination" article on Wikipedia and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: A; Are there grammar errors or informal language B; Are there irrelevant sections or sentences, and C; Is anything left out of the article that should be there?

    I feel like there is a lot of repetition in words, which makes it informal somewhat. They could've started the into a bit more detailed and with more explanation on their interest in writing the article. The first two with in the second sentence were unnecessary. Some topic titles were too long. More periods could've been used to make some sentences make more sense in one. 
   
   I think that the "Discrimination against refugees, asylum seekers, migrants, and internally displaced persons" is an unnecessary topic. I believe that because most of that had been stated in the "around the world" topic. Also, the different country topics because there are other countries that get a lot of racism towards them not only those that are stated. They could've talked about multiple countries in one topic even if it made the paragraph a little longer. The "Netherlands" topic only has one sentence! Why even make it a topic? 
   
    Yes, either more countries added in a subtopic or talk about them all in one instead of writing about a few only. I feel like a Hispanic and Chinese topic would've been great since there are a lot of things to say about racism from those two countries. I also believe that the "overall trends" topic isn't necessary. Every percentage can be added with their country topic. At the end of a topic, it would look good as well.   

    From errors, I think there wasn't much in the grammar just a lot of repetition in words more than twice in one sentence. I believe that there were a lot of irrelevant topics because some of them only had about one or two sentences. They could've written just one topic and summed up all of the countries in there. I also feel that the Hispanic and Chinese topics would've been really great for the article since those two countries have a lot to talk about.