User:Studentuw123/Equity co-investment/TayG1201 Peer Review

General info

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Whose work are you reviewing?

Studentuw123

Link to draft you're reviewing
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Studentuw123/Equity_co-investment?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Equity co-investment

Evaluate the drafted changes

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Lead

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The lead has a concise introductory sentence but I feel like it doesn't give a description of the article's major sections. I think there could be a sentence or two added to give more clarification on what an equity co-investment is/purpose used for?

Content

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I like how you deal with specific equity gaps in the limitations section. Content is up to date and relevant.

Tone and Balance

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The entire limitations section focuses on the drawbacks so I was thinking you could add another section to make it more neutral and talk about the benefits/positive aspects. It will even out the article. I also think it would be helpful to somehow provide a description or specific example section of an equity co-investment.

Sources and References

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I would try to add more sources in the article, because there only seems to be around 1 or 2 sources per paragraph. The more links the better to reference the information you provide.

Organization

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It is organized well- clear and simple! Maybe add another section to spread out the information.

Images and Media

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There is only one image, maybe add one more?

Overall Impressions

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There were some good contributions made to the limitations section, I would just say add more sources to support the information, and to keep the article neutral, add a benefits section as well! If you could, I would try to add another section whether it be referencing specific examples or how it works detailed, etc. I would also take the names out when referencing who stated what, and just say "a potential drawback is, or one idea is...". Ex: Social status and experience are two forms that co-investment opportunities rely on and can provide limitations for deals to go through. Trying to maintain neutral sentences, and less essay-like. I really like the organization of the article, how it is concise and easy to understand!