User:Sparklehorse23/National Action Plan for Climate Change/Keyle.horton Peer Review

General info

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Whose work are you reviewing?

Sparklehorse23

Link to draft you're reviewing
Sandbox Draft
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Mainspace Article

Evaluate the drafted changes

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  • There is a spelling error in the second sentence of the draft (it is part of the mainspace article, not what was added).
  • The first mention of Modi seems a bit biased given the wording. Maybe try taking a more neutral tone.
  • Make sure to put the citation after the punctuation.
  • Spell out Prime Minister instead of using the abbreviation.
  • The paragraph added about failing promises and budget really takes on a biased, accusatory tone.
  • Grammatical errors in the first two sentence under Drawbacks subsection (part of the mainspace article).
  • Grammatical error in the third sentence and spelling error in the forth sentence added under Drawbacks subsection –– where new additions start.


Overall, an informative article. It would be good to copyedit the mainspace article, at least where you are adding text, and try to make your writing more neutral. Good job!