Heather's Comments
10/15- Nice work, Samantha! The paragraph you added on birds is great. Can you please make this revisions though?
Change this: During the summer months of June and July, it is the busiest nesting to: June and July are the busiest nesting months...
If there is more you find on birds, I think a few more sentences would be appropriate.
The reference section isn't complete. Both source 2 and 3 need to have the actual title of the journal this was published in, not just "Gale." Also, disconnect that link because readers can't access it without a school log-in. Let me know if this isn't clear.
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Samantha's Work Log
edit- September 29, 2019: Assigned the Bolinas Lagoon article the link Read through the article and reviewed sources.
- September 29, 2019: Researched on Gale Combined. (1.5)
- October 13, 2019: Included fowl information around Bolinas Lagoon, Changed beachgoers to beach-goers (1)
- October 20, 2019: Revised sentence in paragraph 3, Added in Publishing in source 2&3. Couldn't remove or disconnect link (.5)
- October 20, 2019 Researched for more information about local fowl (1)
References
edit- Ref 1: Brown, Ann Marie. "The birds of Bolinas." Sunset, June 2001, p. 34. Gale In Context: Biography, https://link.gale.com/apps/doc/A75262010/GPS?u=orov49112&sid=GPS&xid=846226cc. Accessed 29 Sept. 2019.
- Ref 2: Levin, Rachel. "Egrets, herons, and you: it's nesting season for the birds of Bolinas--prime time to get a good look." Sunset, Mar. 2006, p. 44. Gale In Context: Biography, https://link.gale.com/apps/doc/A142780128/GPS?u=orov49112&sid=GPS&xid=a26b2c4a. Accessed 29 Sept. 2019.
- Ref 3: "Stinson Beach without traffic: you hike-and-bus." Sunset, Dec. 1990, p. 14. Gale In Context: Biography, https://link.gale.com/apps/doc/A9127242/GPS?u=orov49112&sid=GPS&xid=42b475db. Accessed 29 Sept. 2019.
- Ref 4: Kasner, Andrew C., and Thomas P. Dixon. "Aerial foraging over open water by Great Egrets and Snowy Egrets on schooling freshwater fish." Wilson Bulletin, vol. 115, no. 2, 2003, p. 199+. Gale In Context: Biography, https://link.gale.com/apps/doc/A112943985/GPS?u=orov49112&sid=GPS&xid=6f9eca00. Accessed 21 Oct. 2019.
- Ref 5: Champagnon, Jocelyn, et al. "Effects of research disturbance on nest survival in a mixed colony of waterbirds." PeerJ, vol. 7, 2019, p. e7844. Gale OneFile: Health and Medicine, https://link.gale.com/apps/doc/A602347268/GPS?u=orov49112&sid=GPS&xid=14c01a0c. Accessed 20 Oct. 2019.
Samantha's edits to Bolinas Lagoon
editBolinas Lagoon is a tidal estuary, approximately 1,100 acres (4.5 km2) in area,[1] located in the West Marin region of Marin County, California, United States, adjacent to the town of Bolinas. It is a part of the Greater Farallones National Marine Sanctuary and is considered to be among the possible landing spots of Sir Francis Drake on the west coast of North America in 1579.
The lagoon is a back bay of Bolinas Bay on the Pacific coast approximately 15 mi (25 km) northwest of San Francisco. The trough in which the lagoon sits was formed by the San Andreas Fault, which runs directly through it. The lagoon is separated from the main bay by a small spit of land, known as Stinson Beach, and the sand bar that encloses this lagoon is full of beach-goers and surfers on hot days, seeking to escape the heat and the urban Bay Area. State Route 1, the Shoreline Highway, runs along the eastern edge of the lagoon.
How can you access the Lagoon?
Bolinas Lagoon is on the list of wetlands of international importance as defined by the Ramsar Convention for the conservation and sustainable utilization of wetlands. Portions of the lagoon are included in Marin County’s Bolinas Lagoon Open Space Preserve, and the western shore is part of the Golden Gate National Recreation Area.
Bolinas Lagoon is a very popular vocation spot for numerous different birds such as the Egret.[2] Egrets are one of many birds that are housed at Audubon Canyon Ranch, which is approximately 3 miles from the lagoon.[2] June and July are the busiest nesting months for multiple birds such as Great Egrets, Snowy Egrets, and Blue Herons at Audubon Canyon.[3]
The lagoon has a 16.7-square-mile (43 km2) watershed;[1] streams and canyons feeding into it include Audubon Canyon, McKinnan Gulch, Morses Gulch, Picher Canyon, Pike County Gulch, Stinson Gulch, Volunteer Canyon, and Wilkins Gulch. Kent Island is located in the lagoon.
Duxbury Reef State Marine Conservation Area lies offshore from Bolinas. Like an underwater park, this protected marine area helps conserve ocean wildlife and marine ecosystems.
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- ^ a b "Stinson Beach County Water District". Retrieved 2008-01-17.
- ^ a b Brown, Ann (June 1, 2001). "The Birds of Bolinas". Gale Power: Biography. Sunset Publishing Corp. Retrieved September 29, 2019.
{{cite web}}: CS1 maint: url-status (link) - ^ Levin, Rachel (March 1, 2006). "Egrets, herons, and you: it's nesting season for the birds of Bolinas--prime time to get a good look". Gale Power: Biography. Sunset Publishing Corp. Retrieved September 29, 2019.
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