User:SamanthaBethSchwartz/Drag queen/Sierra.french Peer Review
Hello!
There is nothing published on their sandbox page assigned for their article, so I cannot review their work or intended edits.
As for the actual article, I noticed in the first sentence that they claim that all drag queen are males which seems to blatantly ignore anyone who might be trans, non-binary, agender, gender fluid, or even simply the women who also participate in drag. I think changing it to "a drag queen is a person," so it is all-inclusive. The next sentence says that "historically, most drag queens have been men..." so the history of it is included and shows who most commonly participates.
I feel as if there is a lot of problematic phrasing in the article. As far as I have heard, drag queen can encompass anyone participating in drag. The authors of the article are trying to connote gender and drag and I think that misses the point of the entire concept.
I think the article could be better organized.
I think ball culture should be included directly into the article instead of linked to at the end
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