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Tutorial 1 - Week 3
Activity 1 - From scratch
The initial contribution to the article investigating the topic 'dodgeball' firstly could've included some visual elements, such as pictures of a typical court or the equipment used. Furthermore, the initial article could've done better with more succinct layout, by separating the rules, equipment and court. It also doesn't do a good job of giving a history / origin of the sport and how it was established initially. If I was the second reader of the article, I would edit the article by drawing out the points made in an improved format to improve its readability, whilst also injecting more information on the sport itself such as how one would go about playing it, the skills required, and its basic elements. Also I would include images and talk about its history.
Week 6 - Topic 6
Added a number of crime statistics from a trustworthy source (Queensland Police website), this expanded the information included for the topic "Crime in Queensland"
Number of total offences in Queensland since 2012:
2012: 437,863
2013: 435,599
2014: 440,986
2015: 460,113
2016: 503,278
2017: 493,230
2018: 516,899