User:PastaRL/Pyxis (vessel)/Paragonicus Peer Review

General info

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Whose work are you reviewing?

PastaRL

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User:PastaRL/Pyxis (vessel)
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Pyxis (vessel)

Evaluate the drafted changes

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Lead

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The lead provides plenty of general information on what a Pyxis is, and your addition to it adds more clarity. I do wonder about the final sentence of the lead, which talks about the variety among Athenian pyxides, yet does not go into any specifics on what these varieties are. Perhaps this would be a place to do more research to answer the question.

Structure

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The article structure of the original version (that you kept) is fine. However, there are some concepts from the lead that might warrant its own section in the article Right now, there is a section about types, but the lead talks about material and exact names of the pyxis. These are both possible ways to expand the article through the addition of new sections on these topics.

Coverage Balance

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Overall, the article has a lot of information about Athenian pyxides, which is probably to be expected. However, there are hints that there is a greater non-Athenian world of pyxides throughout the rest of the article, including regions outside of Greece such as Etruria. There may be further research to do on pyxides outside of a Greek context.

Content Neutrality

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The article avoids the use of biased language, and some language is constructed in a way to promote neutrality (e.g. "evidence suggests"). Since this does not seem to be a very controversial topic with many differing opinions, neutrality could be regulated as a secondary concern.

Sources

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For the length of the article, there seems to be an adequate number of sources and most assertions seem to have a footnote. I wonder if the age of many of the sources here could possibly make some of the facts in the article outdated; maybe we have a greater understanding of pyxides in more current scholarship. I also believe there are some technical errors in the footnote list that I would not know how to rectify.