User:Nichellecorpuz/Partulina variabilis/Kaytie.conselva Peer Review

General info

Whose work are you reviewing?

Kaytie.conselva

Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Kaytie.conselva/Antisabia imbricata
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): Antisabia imbricata

Evaluate the drafted changes

Please answer the following questions in detail addressed to the classmate whose article you are reviewing. Remember this is constructive feedback, so be polite and clear in your suggestions for improving their article. We are all working together to improve the Wikipedia pages for species native to Hawaii and for the World to meet.

Use a different font style (bold or italic) for your answers so it is easy for the author to see your comments!

First, what does the article do well? (Think about content, structure, complementing the existing article, writing, etc.) - The article did well in including the proper information for each section. It has at least one to three sentences for each section that describes her species.
- Is there anything from your review that impressed you? - I was impressed with the fact that this species are able to live in corals.
Check the main points of the article:
- Does the article only discuss the species the article is about? (and not the genus or family) - Yes, the article only speaks about her assigned species and nothing else. The only other organism stated were the family of her species.
- Are the subtitles for the different sections appropriate? - Yes, the subtitles involved the main parts that should be discussed. It talks about the main details of her species such as what they are, where they live, thier origin, and more.
- Is the information under each section appropriate or should anything be moved? - All the information is properly included for each section. She also included notes for herself in parenthesis but will get removed after she makes the change.
- Is the writing style and language of the article appropriate? (concise and objective information for a worldwide audience) - Yes, the writing style is proper and the language is appropriate. She uses proper english grammer and language to write out her draft.
Check the sources:
- Is each statement or sentence in the text linked to at least one source in the reference list with a little number? - Not every sentence is link with a source. However, there was a link after each topic that was spoken about. She had at least one sources reference in each section accept the Living Environment potion.
- Is there a reference list at the bottom? - Yes, there is a reference list at the bottom with all the 5 sources she used to write out her draft.
- Is each of those sources linked with a little number? - Yes each one of her 5 sources were at least linked once.
- What is the quality of the sources? - The quality of the sources are good and have reliable information. They seem trustworthy as they are organizations that specialize in organisms and spread proper data.
Give some suggestions on how to improve the article (think of anything that could be explained in more details or with more clarity or any issues addressed in the questions above):
- What changes do you suggest and how would they improve the article? - I suggest adding more information to the living environment section. I also think she should include images that portray her species. Lastly, she should add wikipedia links to words that may seem confusing to give the audience a separate reference that gives a definition to it.
- Is the article ready for prime-time and the world to see on Wikipedia? If not, how could the author improve the article to be ready? - No, the article needs a few additional information as it is a little short. It could also use more images. However, it does get straight to the point and has a good structure to it.
What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article? - The author should add more information to the living environment section and possible say what specific kinds of reefs, coral, and rocks their species lives in.
Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? - I see a morphology section that I should add to my own article in order to explain the evolution and origin of my species.

Comments: - Nichelle Corpuz

Thank you for the feedback. I will make sure to fix my article and add more information and pictures to make it more engaging. I will also reread my writing and look at my sources to see if there is anything else I can add that gets straight to the point while still having the good information needed.