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Gas heater

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Gas_heater

• Lead description: there is barely a lead description in this article. It lacks all the important information that a lead should have.
• Lack of information (needs expansion): the article lacks important information on the topic. It needs to expand and provide more details.
• Lack of appropriate citations: there are no sources cited.
• In need of copyediting.
• Appropriateness of content: some information is presented without a clear link to the article.
• Encyclopedic tone: the article was written as if it is a reflection, thus it is not in the encyclopedic tone.

Prayer meeting

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Prayer_meeting

• Appropriateness of content: I felt that the content of this article was poor and it did not add anything new (part of it was also because it lacked sources.
• Lack of appropriate citations: there are not enough sources to support the information presented.
• Lead description: this section does not provide good information on the topic.

Articles that need editing

• Canadian Immigrant Investor Program
• Gas heater
• Chicken nugget
• Neapolitan piastra

Analysis Assignment

Article 1: Rowing

• Audience and Purpose

The article is supposed to "deal with the more general types of rowing [...] rather than the sport of competitive rowing" as claimed in the lead. This article is an informative article that I think aims to provide the reader (someone with very basic knowledge of rowing) with the basics on the subject. The purpose of this article is clear at the beginning but becomes vague as the article goes on. At first, the article included some general information on the types of rowing systems and its origin (addressing the uninformed audience). But then, the article moves into some very specific facts/information (no longer general information) and thus, it addressed a very different audience. Thus, the articles will need some work on its content in relation to the purpose. From the talk history, there was a discussion on what to include in the article and they decided to disregard the sport aspect because it is in another article. Moreover, there were some requests to add more information on various topics but no one was willing to take that step because none of the editors were experts on the topic. All recent edit focused on minor things not content related.

• Challenges and Points of Concern

1. The organization of the article needs a lot of work
2. The content of the article must be reviewed to match the purpose
3. The content must be reviewed to match the audience of the article
4. The lead needs to be reviewed and edited
5. The article needs more sources/references
6. Some sections of the article are very dense and it contains too many details --> it would be better to divide it up into different sections that way more content can be included and it opens up more opportunities for other editors to be involved.

Article 2: Cats in ancient Egypt

• Audience and Purpose

The purpose of this article is to provide the audience with an understanding of the role that cats played in ancient Egypt. the audience of this article are people who are interested to read about the role that cats played in ancient Egypt (which is evident from the title of the article). The content of the article revolves around 2 main parts, the different time period and the way cats were seen and depicted, and the discoveries made. This article has been intensively edited over time. There is one editor that seems to return back to this article to review it more recently.

• Challenges and Points of Concern

1. The lead needs some refining
2. Content can be reorganized
3. The article needs more content
4. There is some information/content that can be revised and made into its own section.
5. Copyediting is needed