User:Macykgrimsley/African philosophy/EricDaughtry22 Peer Review

Peer review

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General info

Whose work are you reviewing? Macykgrimsley
Link to draft you're reviewing:

Lead

Lead evaluation

The lead is great, it meets all the requirements recommended by Wikipedia. Informative yet is also concise. Impressed that it mentions all the other major sections you will talk about.

Content

Content evaluation

I can see how the content and major topics of the article can relate to the class. It's a rather interesting topic. I see in the reference link that there were some recent contributions in 2018 which is good but they came from a blog. Maybe you could find something that would seem a little less bias. I'm not trying to imply that it is, but just in case.

Tone and Balance

Tone and balance evaluation

Tone seems to be rather neutral. Maybe take a look and see if some sections can be reduced a bit.

Sources and References

Sources and references evaluation

Some sections show that they need to be cited.

Organization

Organization evaluation

The article is quite organized, I envy it! I think it's inevitable that the article is a bit tough to read being that it is such a scholarly topic. So a suggestion when/if you make contributions: be thorough yet concise so that any reader can understand it.

Images and Media

Images and media evaluation

I think it would be nice to add some more images and media to let the readers eyes rest and help those that are visual learners. Possibly some geographical images in case the reader doesn't know the countries in the regions mentioned in the article.

Overall impressions

Overall evaluation

Overall the article seems to be written quite well. Its organization is superb given the fact that there is so much important information provided. I think more images and media would give it some life and if possible some could replace text. I like how the lead gives a brief introduction of the topic and briefly mentions the major topics to proceed it.