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Refrig dels started 10/30: https://www.newspapers.com/image/146298356/?terms=Majestic%20Refrigerators&match=1
Liquidation sale (radios and refrigs): "https://www.newspapers.com/clip/46007609/chicago-tribune/
| Re writing and MoS issues:
Per WP:NCCORP, I think the boldings of the company names in the lede should be to the full legacy name of the company. So it would be the Grigsby-Grunow Company, the Majestic Radio & Television Corporation, and the Wilcox-Gay Corporation. But the bolding of the company names as redirect targets is only done in the lede; it doesn't get repeated in the article body.
in 1934 during the Depression, - the text as well as the link should be to the Great Depression.
in the 1930s–1940s - I think this is usually written '1930s and 1940s'.
n 1927, Grigsby-Grunow began ... - start a new paragraph here, since the previous paragraph is background.
with a 9" speaker and with a 12" speaker - these should use 'inch' rather than '"' and should also give a metric conversion, such as: with a 9-inch (23 cm) speaker.
... with their typically poor selectivity, hooked up to a battery and producing inferior sound ... - this part of the sentence doesn't parse well to me and it isn't clear what role the choice of power source plays in the quality of the sound.
Grigsby-Grunow sponsored The Majestic Theater of the Air on the CBS radio network - needs a one- or two-word description of what this program aired - drama, music, variety format? - so that the reader doesn't have to click through to find that most basic information.
40% market share - use 'percent' instead, per MOS:PERCENT.
in October, 1928, In a March, 1930, review, etc - most people would write these without interior commas, but I guess this is okay too. at Naval Air Station, Lakehurst (NJ), - the 'NJ' is awkward like this. I think it can be omitted, since what state this was in doesn't matter to the point being made.
and was called "the sensation of the Chicago Exchange" - called by whom? Either give an in-text attribution or replace with a paraphrase. a share purchased at $40 in 1928 had risen to $1,100 in value - it isn't clear when this peak was reached. By inference from the previous sentence it was in 1930, but that would be after the stock market crash. due to "several new mechanical features" - is this quote from their advertising or from some writer?
As the Depression worsened - doesn't need to be linked again, or if it is, the text should be 'Great Depression'
The model 161 (pictured) - would be better to say '(pictured at top)', since the nearest image to this text is of something else.
"Majestic Radio & Television" Years (1936–1949) - Quotes not necessary in this header and 'years' should be downcase.
Despite the collapse of Grigsby-Grunow, Majestic Radios continued to be made through subsequent corporate ownership changes and reorganizations ... - This sentence is awkward where it is, since it is about not just this section but the next. Maybe it should be adapted for use in the lede instead of here?
for another nineteen years. - isn't this 1936 (new company formed) to 1958 (production stopped in Michigan), which is twenty-two years not nineteen?
The Majestic Radio & Television company was formed - I think it was known as a Corporation not a company and it should be capitalized.
"goodwill" - this is a well-known financial/accounting term, so I don't think it needs to be in quotes.
Re citing and footnoting: When the bankruptcy court rejected its reorganization plan, Grigsby-Grunow was forced into liquidation in June, 1934. - needs a cite. Would also be interesting to know why their plan was rejected.
... Brooklyn Daily Eagle. AP. June 17, ... - I think it is better to spell out 'Associated Press' here, otherwise it tends to get visually lost and some foreign readers may not be familiar with just 'AP'.
Two other Brooklyn Daily Eagle cites (fn 18 and fn 19) don't have url's to the article or credits to Newspapers.com (assuming that's where they were found). This is also true of a number of other old newspaper cites, such as fn 1, fn 7, fn 9, fn 10, etc. If they were found in Newspapers.com or ProQuest or Gale or some other online service that has given access to Wikipedia contributors, the cites should be have url's and credits. On the other hand, if they were found by visiting a local library's microfiche collection or were found in a scrapbook or whatever, then they are okay as they are.
The footnotes are inconsistent about using 'New York Times' or 'The New York Times' and about whether it is linked.
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Re broad coverage issues:
the Grigsby-Grunow company had started in 1921 as a maker of automotive accessories - were they successful at this? What kind of accessories did they sell? How big was their selling area? If Grigsby-Grunow was only in business for 13 years, then this pre-radios period was about half of that. So even if it's not what they are now remembered for, it could use a little more description than it has here.
with installment purchase plans offered by many dealers - is this the Majestic dealer network that is made reference to much later in the article? Or just dealers in general? What was the Grigsby-Grunow approach towards retail sales? And what about repair people if there were problems, how did Grigsby-Grunow handle that?
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Did the Majestic Household Utilities subsidiary do well? Poorly? Were the refrigerators they made thought well of from an engineering perspective?
The 1936 Brooklyn Eagle source shows that 'Television' was indeed part of the new Majestic company's name right from the start. This seems unusually forward-thinking, since the first U.S. electronic television broadcasting was still three years into the future. Are there any sources that comment upon this?
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Majestic Radio & Television reorganized again after filing for bankruptcy on October 24, 1939. - the article doesn't explain what led up to this failure.
as well as the lack of success in television manufacturing. - other than the company name, this is the first indication the article has given that they were trying to make televisions too. It could use a little elaboration.
Otis Boykin and George Switzer (mineralogist) both worked for Majestic Radio & Television Corporation at some point, anything worth adding to the article around them?
You have added categories for the Grigsby-Grunow Company but not for the other two. One way to avoid having this become completely confusing is to have only categories for the radio product/brand in this article, and then edit that company's main redirect's file and place the company categories there. Such redirects-with-categories appear in italics in the category's view.: Done |
| Re images:
The 1947 Majestic portable radio image looks really washed out, especially compared to the original on Flickr which has rich, deep color.
File:Pair of Vintage Cast Iron Majestic Radio Banks, Modeled After a 1930s Majestic Radio Console (8568507531).jpg might be worth including, since it shows how the Majestic name and look were esteemed enough to base other objects on.
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