User:Isobelpowell/Gum Wall/Kfoltz2 Peer Review

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Whose work are you reviewing?
Isobelpowell
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https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Isobelpowell/Gum_Wall?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Gum Wall

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Hello!

Overall, the article is looking a lot better! I don't see a lot of things that need to be changed, but I do have a couple of suggestions below:

  • History: change the wording so it says "the wall is located next to the box office..."
  • History: if you can find more information on the history of the Gum Wall, it would make this section stronger. You could even find interviews of people sharing their experiences at the Gum Wall. I would include what the main incentive was for people to start sticking their gum on the wall.
  • Recognition: who named it one of the top 5 germiest tourist attractions? Make sure to include this so we know it's reliable!
  • Recognition: I would go into more detail on the importance of it being the beginning of the ghost tour and talk more about wedding photographers, but make these two separate sentence(s). It would also be interesting to know approximately how many wedding shoots have been done here.
  • Recognition: I would see if there are other films/documentaries that have the gum wall in them. I know several things have been filmed in Seattle, so the gum wall is probably in another production.
  • Since there is only one gum wall in Seattle, I would include an address and a map of the location.
  • References: reference #5 doesn't directly go to the article - it's just the home page for the website that wrote the article. I would try to find the exact article again and include a link that will take you straight to the article. The rest of the references look great!
  • Just wanted to note - the use of images is great! You really get a good idea of what the gum wall looks like.
  • I made a couple of minor grammatical grammar corrections (including some of the ones I suggested above)!