User:Iamthedoctor2011/Katherine Aidala/ProfessorCuprous Peer Review

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iamthedoctor2011

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Katherine Aidala
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Katherine_Aidala&oldid=1095044502

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There are some good additions to the section on Early Life, and generally the article is written well. Here are some suggestions:

Lead: The two existing sentences could be combined into one and a bit more detail added. Something like... "Katherine E. Aidala is a physicist and professor at Mount Holyoke College in Mount Hadley, Massachusetts. She directs a physics research program focused on [say what she does and cite] and is an advocate for women in STEM field. She is also Director of the Fumble Maker & Innovation Lab. She has received numerous awards for physics research and education and is a Fellow of the American Physical Society."

Other sections: You could consider separating a "Career" section from an "Awards and Honors" section like there is in Squire Booker's article. The section on "Early life and education" seems more like a "Career" section because it does't say anything about her early life (ie prior to college). Can you add anything about her Early Life in a section separate form her academic career? - her sister is also a research professor in physics, and I think her dad is as well. Her sister's article is here: Christine Aidala.

Regarding the section labeled "Career", this seems more like a summary of her awards. Perhaps re-organize the sections to have "Early Live" (If applicable), "Academic and Research Career", and "Awards and Honors" sections. Or here's another article with a different division of sections: Katherine Franz

Wow! Reference 3 seems notable enough to mention and I don't see it discussed in the article.

Consider a separate "advocacy for Women in STEM" section?

Did she do a post-doc? Its not mentioned, but I am surprised if she didn't.

In either the lead or elsewhere in the article, it should mention that she is a "named" professor - she is the "Kennedy-Shelkunoff Professor of Physics". [1]

  1. ^ "Katherine Aidala". Mount Holyoke College. 2016-02-05. Retrieved 2022-06-30.