User talk:Fowler&fowler/HHH FAC
Hello:
As I explained on my user talk page, I've been mostly off WP for almost a year (I think) and am rusty. I'm also a little strapped for time. I will start my comments at FAC, but rather than holding forth more extensively there, I'm penning my thoughts here, and you are welcome to take them or leave them. I'm still reading your article, and enjoying reading it, as usual.
My thoughts:
Lead
edit- Controversialist: Is the word common enough these days for an encyclopedia entry lead sentence?
- The first attested use per OED was in 1750. The frequency of use at the time was 0.055 per million recorded words in written English, or once per 8.5 million recorded words. The frequency of use at its peak in 1870 was 0.95 per million words, which is more or less once per one million recorded words in English. By 2010 the frequency was back down to 0.12 per million words, or approximately once per 8.4 million words in English. By March 2023, it had slipped further to 0.015 times per million words in English, or once per 66 million words. (I'm doing the sums in my head, so they might not be exact, but they are probably not far off the mark. In any case, it is not the numbers per se, but the relative drop in usage that might be informative.)
- What think you of "polemicist" instead? Tim riley talk 11:40, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- Much better. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 13:01, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- Good. Done. Tim riley talk 15:41, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- Much better. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 13:01, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- What think you of "polemicist" instead? Tim riley talk 11:40, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- The first attested use per OED was in 1750. The frequency of use at the time was 0.055 per million recorded words in written English, or once per 8.5 million recorded words. The frequency of use at its peak in 1870 was 0.95 per million words, which is more or less once per one million recorded words in English. By 2010 the frequency was back down to 0.12 per million words, or approximately once per 8.4 million words in English. By March 2023, it had slipped further to 0.015 times per million words in English, or once per 66 million words. (I'm doing the sums in my head, so they might not be exact, but they are probably not far off the mark. In any case, it is not the numbers per se, but the relative drop in usage that might be informative.)
- "devout member" doesn't identify the father despite "brethren.".
- The turn-of-the-century (?) picture on the Brethren's WP page, does show some women.
- True. Redrawn. Tim riley talk 11:40, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- The turn-of-the-century (?) picture on the Brethren's WP page, does show some women.
- Plymouth Brethren I don't know what the reigning dogma is at MOS about links, ...
- ... but for those readers who don't want to click out early in the lead, could that link be paraphrased in some succinct way?
- General non-FAC remark: Shades here of the childhood of Wingate of Wingate's Circus, whose biography I read in high school. As for an oppressive father, shades also of Mandell Creighton, who too lost his mother as a child, but whose father, though not a zealous evangelist, never remarried and lost his temper easily. Similarly, Creighton's father was not generous in supplementing his son's less-than-adequate postmastership (a tuition waiver) at Merton.
- I've added a word or two to put the PB in context. Tim riley talk 11:40, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- General non-FAC remark: Shades here of the childhood of Wingate of Wingate's Circus, whose biography I read in high school. As for an oppressive father, shades also of Mandell Creighton, who too lost his mother as a child, but whose father, though not a zealous evangelist, never remarried and lost his temper easily. Similarly, Creighton's father was not generous in supplementing his son's less-than-adequate postmastership (a tuition waiver) at Merton.
- ... but for those readers who don't want to click out early in the lead, could that link be paraphrased in some succinct way?
- "was not allowed to go to school until he was fourteen, and was largely self-educated. He was admitted to the University of Oxford"
- Would the following be more easily understood by a novice reader: "was not allowed to go to school until he was fourteen. Largely self-educated and lacking in means (/financial resources), he was admitted to the University of Oxford as an unattached student. He gained a first-class bachelor's degree in 1884, and election to a fellowship at All Souls College, Oxford the same year."?
- Redrawn in the course of attending to your earlier point Tim riley talk 11:40, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- Would the following be more easily understood by a novice reader: "was not allowed to go to school until he was fourteen. Largely self-educated and lacking in means (/financial resources), he was admitted to the University of Oxford as an unattached student. He gained a first-class bachelor's degree in 1884, and election to a fellowship at All Souls College, Oxford the same year."?
- "Feeling a vocation to minister to the urban poor, Henson served in the East End of London and Barking ..."
- I'm guessing "vocation" is used here in the meaning of "conviction," rather than "occupation," but would most readers know this, assuming my conjecture is correct? Would "Conscious of a conviction to minister to ..." be less ambiguous for some?
- PS Actually, I like "feeling" here with "occupation" too (e.g. in the meaning of feeling one's way among likes, dislikes, and propensities to arrive at an occupation), but I'm not sure this is implied.
- I'm not keen on "conviction", and as we have an article on vocation I've added a blue link to it. Tim riley talk 11:40, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- PS Actually, I like "feeling" here with "occupation" too (e.g. in the meaning of feeling one's way among likes, dislikes, and propensities to arrive at an occupation), but I'm not sure this is implied.
- I'm guessing "vocation" is used here in the meaning of "conviction," rather than "occupation," but would most readers know this, assuming my conjecture is correct? Would "Conscious of a conviction to minister to ..." be less ambiguous for some?
- "before becoming chaplain of an ancient hospice in Ilford in 1895."
- Unless "ancient" is used in the meaning of long-established or very old, its 1185 CE (the year of its founding) would be smack in the medieval period. Perhaps "ancient" has some other specialized meaning in this context, but generally, its use might confuse readers who click on the link and probe further.
- Medieval is much better. Done. Tim riley talk 11:40, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- Unless "ancient" is used in the meaning of long-established or very old, its 1185 CE (the year of its founding) would be smack in the medieval period. Perhaps "ancient" has some other specialized meaning in this context, but generally, its use might confuse readers who click on the link and probe further.
- "In 1900 he was appointed to the high-profile post of vicar of St Margaret's, Westminster and canon of Westminster Abbey."
- This might be a personal peeve. I doubt the word "high-profile" existed in 1900; of course, that is not reason enough not to use it, but would something like: "The year 1900 brought him into the public eye as vicar of St Margaret's, Westminster and canon of Westminster Abbey." be better? Your call.
- I'll ponder this. The phrase "high-profile" was known in the early 20th century – but only as a technical term for a certain type of vehicle tyre! The first example of its use as here is dated by the OED to 1950. So point taken.
- :) I'll have to look at the high profile tyre entry. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 13:01, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- Replaced "high-profile" here and in the main text. Tim riley talk 09:40, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- :) I'll have to look at the high profile tyre entry. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 13:01, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- I'll ponder this. The phrase "high-profile" was known in the early 20th century – but only as a technical term for a certain type of vehicle tyre! The first example of its use as here is dated by the OED to 1950. So point taken.
- This might be a personal peeve. I doubt the word "high-profile" existed in 1900; of course, that is not reason enough not to use it, but would something like: "The year 1900 brought him into the public eye as vicar of St Margaret's, Westminster and canon of Westminster Abbey." be better? Your call.
- More soon. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 18:16, 16 July 2024 (UTC)
- Thank you for these points. Very helpful, and I look forward to more. Tim riley talk 11:40, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- "While there, and as Dean of Durham (1913–1918), he wrote prolifically and sometimes controversially."
- Would "While there, and thereafter as Dean of Durham (1913–1918), he wrote prolifically and sometimes controversially." emphasize the time sequence more to a novice reader?
- Good point. Tweaked. Tim riley talk 15:41, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- Would "While there, and thereafter as Dean of Durham (1913–1918), he wrote prolifically and sometimes controversially." emphasize the time sequence more to a novice reader?
- He was tolerant of a wide range of theological views; because of this some members of the Anglo-Catholic wing of the Church of England accused him of heresy and sought unsuccessfully to block his appointment as Bishop of Hereford in 1917.
- Would a subordinate clause here be better? E.g. "As in these writings he showed tolerance for a wide range of theological views, some members of the Anglo-Catholic wing of the Church of England accused him of heresy and sought unsuccessfully to block his appointment as Bishop of Hereford in 1917."
- I think my original is crisper. Tim riley talk 15:41, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- Would a subordinate clause here be better? E.g. "As in these writings he showed tolerance for a wide range of theological views, some members of the Anglo-Catholic wing of the Church of England accused him of heresy and sought unsuccessfully to block his appointment as Bishop of Hereford in 1917."
- "In 1920, after two years in the largely rural diocese of Hereford, Henson returned to Durham as its bishop."
- As the fact of it being rural is unknown to the reader, the definite article might not be appropriate. Would the following be better? "In 1920, after two years at Hereford, a largely rural diocese, Henson returned to Durham as its bishop."
- Someone could very well ask though: why are we mentioning "rural" at all? I.e. is "rural" here serving to minimize or depreciate Hereford in some way? Would the following be better: In 1920, after two years at Hereford, a largely rural diocese, Henson returned to the industrial city of Durham as its bishop. The north-east of England ...?"
- Excellent point, and now attended to. Tim riley talk 15:41, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- Someone could very well ask though: why are we mentioning "rural" at all? I.e. is "rural" here serving to minimize or depreciate Hereford in some way? Would the following be better: In 1920, after two years at Hereford, a largely rural diocese, Henson returned to the industrial city of Durham as its bishop. The north-east of England ...?"
- As the fact of it being rural is unknown to the reader, the definite article might not be appropriate. Would the following be better? "In 1920, after two years at Hereford, a largely rural diocese, Henson returned to Durham as its bishop."
- "Henson was opposed to strikes, trade unions and socialism, and for a time his forthright expression of his views made him unpopular in the diocese.
- Would the following be better: "Henson was opposed to strikes, trade unions and socialism, and for a time his outspoken opposition to them made him unpopular in the diocese.?" (Some borderline alliteration here, though not of stresses.)
- Tweaked. Thanks for that: a distinct improvement. Tim riley talk 15:41, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- Would the following be better: "Henson was opposed to strikes, trade unions and socialism, and for a time his outspoken opposition to them made him unpopular in the diocese.?" (Some borderline alliteration here, though not of stresses.)
- The remaining sentences in the lead are fine.
- (Non-FAC remark) I have the Oxford World's Classics version of all three Books of Common Prayer somewhere. Will look at the 1928 version more carefully. Thanks.
- (Non-FAC reply) I ordered a copy of the new BCP with "Elizabeth, our Queen" replaced by "Charles, our King" last October and the blessed thing still hasn't been published. Some crisis at the publisher, it seems. Tim riley talk 15:41, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- Sorry, I didn't see this. They should refund your payment and send a complimentary copy. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 11:35, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- (Non-FAC remark) I have the Oxford World's Classics version of all three Books of Common Prayer somewhere. Will look at the 1928 version more carefully. Thanks.
- Done with the lead. Will post on the individual sections next in the snatches of time I find. They look good though. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 13:01, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- Look forward to further thoughts. A pleasure to do business with you! Tim riley talk 15:41, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- :) And you! Fowler&fowler«Talk» 23:12, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
- Look forward to further thoughts. A pleasure to do business with you! Tim riley talk 15:41, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
Early years
edit- First half
- General remark: The issue in this section is not so much the writing, which is smooth, but the sources and what they say. They leave his early childhood a bit opaque.
- The sources can't be blamed much for this, as Henson was extremely reticent about his childhood. In his 12,000+ page, three-volume memoirs, he devotes just over three pages to his childhood and pre-Oxford years. – Tim riley talk 08:46, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- Could his reticence, then, be a notable fact, warranting mention in some fashion in this section? It would help us readers out. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 11:35, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- Good. Done. Tim riley talk 12:41, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- Henson's biographer John Peart-Binns writes that Henson senior's "bleak outlook on the world" and "feeling of urgency to be prepared for the Second Coming" caused his family life to be one of all-pervading darkness.[2]
- Why did the father have the bleak outlook in the first place? Is there anything about the father's character other than the preparation for the Second Coming that would have created an oppressive family atmosphere?
- As I said to UndercoverClassicist on the FAC page, I must tread carefully here: I don't want to give offence. Henson senior, as I read the sources, practised a particularly joyless and bleak form of Christianity. His second and third wives seem to have mitigated the oppressiveness of his way of life to some extent so far as the children were concerned. – Tim riley talk 08:46, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- "Joyless" is an excellent word, which might be worth including somewhere in my opinion.Fowler&fowler«Talk» 11:35, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- Yes, but it's my word. Can't recall seeing it in the sources. Tim riley talk 12:41, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- "Joyless" is an excellent word, which might be worth including somewhere in my opinion.Fowler&fowler«Talk» 11:35, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- As I said to UndercoverClassicist on the FAC page, I must tread carefully here: I don't want to give offence. Henson senior, as I read the sources, practised a particularly joyless and bleak form of Christianity. His second and third wives seem to have mitigated the oppressiveness of his way of life to some extent so far as the children were concerned. – Tim riley talk 08:46, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- Why did the father have the bleak outlook in the first place? Is there anything about the father's character other than the preparation for the Second Coming that would have created an oppressive family atmosphere?
- His wife shielded the children from the worst excesses of what the biographer Matthew Grimley describes as Thomas's "bigotry",[3]
- Are the forms of bigotry described?
- Not really. Henson says that after his mother died my father’s evangelicalism was deepened and darkened by his bereavement. He seemed to lose interest in everything except religion, and under the influence of some Plymouth Brethren who, about that time, came to live in our neighbourhood, his religion degenerated into bigotry. He never joined the sect, but he read their literature, shared many of their opinions and grew into their narrow intolerance". – Tim riley talk 08:46, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- Are you able to include this quote (in green) in a quote box, or some other fashion, e.g. a footnote, to serve as a vignette accompanying the general description? I do understand there is the Sword of DeMOScles ... Fowler&fowler«Talk» 11:35, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- Excellent idea. Done, and the section is much improved thereby. Tim riley talk 12:41, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- Are you able to include this quote (in green) in a quote box, or some other fashion, e.g. a footnote, to serve as a vignette accompanying the general description? I do understand there is the Sword of DeMOScles ... Fowler&fowler«Talk» 11:35, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- Not really. Henson says that after his mother died my father’s evangelicalism was deepened and darkened by his bereavement. He seemed to lose interest in everything except religion, and under the influence of some Plymouth Brethren who, about that time, came to live in our neighbourhood, his religion degenerated into bigotry. He never joined the sect, but he read their literature, shared many of their opinions and grew into their narrow intolerance". – Tim riley talk 08:46, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- Are the forms of bigotry described?
- but in 1870 she died, and, in Henson's words, "with her died our happiness".[4]
- Moving. Simple and heartfelt.
- Grimley comments that Henson's unhappy childhood "could have come straight out of the pages of Charles Dickens".[3]
- Did Grimley say which books of Dickens? Murdstone and David Copperfield? Pip and the convict? Oliver Twist and Fagin? Anything?
- No. My guess would be David Copperfield rather than Pip and a fortiori Oliver Twist, but that's only my guess. – Tim riley talk 08:46, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- Did Grimley say which books of Dickens? Murdstone and David Copperfield? Pip and the convict? Oliver Twist and Fagin? Anything?
- From an early age the young Henson was a dedicated Christian and felt a vocation for the Anglican priesthood; his father's fundamentalist views were anathema, and left him with what Grimley calls "an enduring hatred of protestant fanaticism".[3]
- This is also a bit perplexing. How did he manage to have this ambition at seven or even ten, when his father remarried? How did he come to know about Anglican priesthood presumably in a closed, not to mention doubting, family universe? Or is it a later early age?
- The sources don't say. – Tim riley talk 08:46, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- This is also a bit perplexing. How did he manage to have this ambition at seven or even ten, when his father remarried? How did he come to know about Anglican priesthood presumably in a closed, not to mention doubting, family universe? Or is it a later early age?
- In 1873 Thomas Henson remarried;[n 1] Emma Parker, widow of a Lutheran pastor, ensured that the children were properly educated. In Henson's phrase, "she recreated the home".[6]
- Simple and eloquent.
- She secured Henson access to his father's extensive library, and introduced him to the works of Walter Scott and translations of classical authors, helping to form his literary style.
- This is perplexing again. We know nothing thus far about the father's library, let alone an extensive one. Do the sources say which books of Scott (e.g. Ivanhoe, a perennial favorite, at least in the 19th-century?) or which translations (e.g. Dryden's of Virgil and others?) HHH found memorable? Presumably, the translator's style would have affected the imbibed one.
- I've deleted "his father's extensive library", which I think was my misreading of the sources. Thomas, we know, read religious publications, and had originally been an Anglican and may have owned religious works left over from his Anglican days, but again, I'm merely guessing and the sources don't say. The Scott novels were brought to the household by HH's stepmother, "along with translations of Thucydides and Plutarch. It was a curiously mixed bag, but I absorbed it with avidity". Tim riley talk 08:46, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- Do you think this last quote too could be included (in a footnote perhaps) as much for the sake of giving depth to the character of Emma Parker, an early 19th-century woman of some education, as to Henson's perceptive intelligence? Fowler&fowler«Talk» 11:35, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- Yes, definitely. Done,. Tim riley talk 12:41, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- Do you think this last quote too could be included (in a footnote perhaps) as much for the sake of giving depth to the character of Emma Parker, an early 19th-century woman of some education, as to Henson's perceptive intelligence? Fowler&fowler«Talk» 11:35, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- I've deleted "his father's extensive library", which I think was my misreading of the sources. Thomas, we know, read religious publications, and had originally been an Anglican and may have owned religious works left over from his Anglican days, but again, I'm merely guessing and the sources don't say. The Scott novels were brought to the household by HH's stepmother, "along with translations of Thucydides and Plutarch. It was a curiously mixed bag, but I absorbed it with avidity". Tim riley talk 08:46, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- This is perplexing again. We know nothing thus far about the father's library, let alone an extensive one. Do the sources say which books of Scott (e.g. Ivanhoe, a perennial favorite, at least in the 19th-century?) or which translations (e.g. Dryden's of Virgil and others?) HHH found memorable? Presumably, the translator's style would have affected the imbibed one.
- Non-FAC remark: Unlike Creighton, born in 1843, who had both Greek and Latin at Carlisle Grammar School (for why else would his fellow students have nicknamed him "Homer?"), HHH, born in 1863, had neither. He certainly would have had Latin, were it not for an oppressive father.
- Non-FAC reply: About the only thing Henson derived from his school was what he called "a smattering of Latin and Greek". He may have exaggerated a bit: Chadwick goes along with "smattering" for Greek, but says that Henson learnt "quite a bit of Latin". – Tim riley talk 08:46, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- Very interesting. Thank you. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 11:35, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- Non-FAC reply: About the only thing Henson derived from his school was what he called "a smattering of Latin and Greek". He may have exaggerated a bit: Chadwick goes along with "smattering" for Greek, but says that Henson learnt "quite a bit of Latin". – Tim riley talk 08:46, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- He remained devoted to her – he called her Carissima – and once he was an adult he cared for her until her death in 1924.[3][7]
- Nice.
- Indeed, but I am unsure whether to offer a translation and risk spoiling the effect: "He remained devoted to her – he called her Carissima (dearest)…" My conclusion is that it is too clunky to add the translation, but I'd welcome a second opinion. – Tim riley talk 08:46, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- I agree. A translation is not needed. Google brings up the meaning immediately. If there is a clamor for it at FAC, you could footnote it, but no more. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 11:35, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- I appreciate your detailed replies. PS I just realized that I created this page in user space not user talk space; as a result, it might not have many of the tools of talk space. I might transfer it to talk space if it makes it easier, but will let you know. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 11:35, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- I agree. A translation is not needed. Google brings up the meaning immediately. If there is a clamor for it at FAC, you could footnote it, but no more. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 11:35, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- Indeed, but I am unsure whether to offer a translation and risk spoiling the effect: "He remained devoted to her – he called her Carissima (dearest)…" My conclusion is that it is too clunky to add the translation, but I'd welcome a second opinion. – Tim riley talk 08:46, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- Nice.
I don't mind where you post your comments as long as you keep then coming. At least two of your suggestions above rank as Eureka moments to me. Tim riley talk 12:57, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- Thank you. Will do. I just read Chadwick's chapter on Henson's childhood. It was written 40 years ago. Chadwick, who held the chair of ecclesiastical history at Cambridge—whose inaugural occupant was Mandell Creighton—and later the Regius Professorship—was very likely on the top of the heap in his field, Perhaps this gave him the confidence to write in a style, at once skimming the trees and delving deep, expansive and literary, impressionistic and detailed—that makes it enjoyable reading, but that perhaps most historians today would not attempt and many scholarly publishers might not accept. It will need quite a few more readings, at least for me, than one. Henson had a complicated childhood. His father had a complicated childhood. Henson was precocious—perhaps not to the extent of a Kipling or a Macaulay, but would not have been far behind in a supportive family environment. It seems even before the arrival of Emma Parker, Henson had been reading Foxe's Book of Martyrs, Bunyan's Pilgrims Progress, and soon after, came to like Paradise Lost in his father's library. With those sorts of literary antecedents, at least for an English style, one could ask: who needs Walter Scott or the translated classics? So, all in all, I think Henson's childhood, being complicated and potentially of various interpretations, is probably best not probed deeper than it is in your excellent section. I'll move on to his Broadstairs years next. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 18:37, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- I was practically weaned on Chadwick and still have two of his Penguins on my shelves. His style and approach are fine with me! Tim riley talk 18:11, 20 July 2024 (UTC)
- Upon a second reading of Chadwick, ch 1, perhaps a couple of factual things could be added. Do you think there would be more context if the second sentence were replaced by some version of, "Thomas Henson was raised in a farming family in Morebath, south of Exmoor. As a young man, he had quarreled with his father and left home to go into business in London. By 1865, when Hensley was two years old, Thomas,
aged 53
, had prospered enough to purchase a property in Broadstairs on the Kent coast, to retire thereat age 53and devote himself to gardening and religion?"
- Good. Done. Tim riley talk 18:11, 20 July 2024 (UTC)
- Immediately after Martha's death, might the following sentence citing Chadwick be better than the one in place citing Grimley? "The older three boys having
alreadyleft home, the gloom that befell the houseafter Martha's death
, the drudgery thatwas experienced bybecame the lot of Thomas's
thetwo daughters, especially the younger, in running a household comprising five children and a father, and Thomas's drift into ever narrower religious beliefs "together made a childhood purgatory worthy of the pen of a Dickens or a Bronte," in the words of historian Owen Chadwick. (Refactored a bit. As usual, you may take it or leave it. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 13:52, 20 July 2024 (UTC))
- Not so keen on tbis - perhaps a bit too detailed. Tim riley talk 18:11, 20 July 2024 (UTC)
- Is it worth changing "From an early age the young Henson was a dedicated Christian and felt a vocation for the Anglican priesthood; his father's fundamentalist views were anathema, and left him with what Grimley calls "an enduring hatred of protestant fanaticism".[3]" to "The young Henson became a dedicated ... protestant fanaticism." but adding the following sentences before:
- "Hensley Hensen was taught by his father to detest slavery. The first novel that
movedas an adult he remembered moving
him was Harriet Beecher Stowe's Uncle Tom's Cabin.<Chadwick, p.3> Thomas Henson also forbade his children to go to school, play with other children, or go on holidays. Deprived ofeverythingall outlets
except religion,histhe
family, and his father's library, Hensely "escaped into the library. At an early age he became the voracious reader of the family."<Chadwick, p. 4> According to Chadwick, among the books in the librarycustomarilycommonly
read by children in those days were John Foxe's Book of Martyrs and John Bunyan's Pilgrim's Progress. Hensely alsocame to lovedeveloped a love for
John Milton's Paradise Lost.<Chadwick, p. 5>DisplayingShowing
precocity, and having no recourse to other boys' books, hebegan to devour thewas soon devouring
mature writings in theology, including the eccentric ones. "By the age of fourteen this prodigious boy had read," in the words of Chadwick, "as deeply in divinity as many young men when they take holy orders."<Chadwick, p. 5> Fowler&fowler«Talk» 22:53, 18 July 2024 (UTC) Revised for clarity. Whether I have succeeded I can't say. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 13:52, 20 July 2024 (UTC)- I suspect, the rebellion against the father probably came in the early teenage years. There was very likely an adaptive phase that preceded it. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 23:04, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- Chadwick seems to corroborate this, but
placingplaces
it even later:By the time he was in his late teens and thinking for himself, he regarded sectarian evangelical religion as a monstrous evil to be fought with every claw. He had horror of the Plymouth Brethren – poisonous schismatics he once called them, several times by other opprobrious names, and never with tolerance. He had horror of over-emotional evangelical preachers, the missionaries of the later nineteenth century, the Baptist Noels of his childhood, the itinerant assailants of the brittle hearts of youth.
<Chadwick, p. 7>
- Chadwick seems to corroborate this, but
- I suspect, the rebellion against the father probably came in the early teenage years. There was very likely an adaptive phase that preceded it. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 23:04, 18 July 2024 (UTC)
- "Hensley Hensen was taught by his father to detest slavery. The first novel that
- "He rose to be head boy of the school, but after a dispute with the headmaster during which Henson expressed "with more passion than respect"[13] his opinion of the head, he ran away from the school in 1879.[13]"
- I wonder if we can call it running away.
This seems more like an ethical departure or flight
Would it be more accurate to paraphrase Chadwick here in some fashion? E.g. : When Thomas Henson moved from Broadstairs to Pegwell Bay in 1879, Hensley became a boarder at Broadstairs Collegiate School. He was soon appointed head boy, but not for long. An incident occurred in the dormitory involving a misdemeanour. Henson, when asked by the Head,identifieddescribed
the misdemeanour butwould
notidentify
the culprits, leadinghimthe Head
tobe accusedaccuse Henson
of lying.Touched to the quick, heDeeply affected, Henson
spoke intemperately to the Headin a confrontationbefore the whole school. That night, Henson wrote a letter to the Head, scaled the school wall, and walked the five miles back to the new Henson family home in Pegwell Bay, neverreturning toattending
any school thereafter.<Chadwick, pp. 11–12> Fowler&fowler«Talk» 02:21, 19 July 2024 (UTC)- I could be wrong, but I got the sense from Chadwick that you couldn't be head boy unless you were in the boarding school. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 02:23, 19 July 2024 (UTC)
- I wonder if we can call it running away.
- Note: I've just taken a look at the Early Years section of Hensley Henson. It is already on the longish side. Last night I was tired. So, if any of the suggestions above are accepted, they
'llmight
need to be reducedquite a bitappropriately. - (HH cont.) "That apart, he found he derived little educational benefit, having already educated himself widely and deeply from books in his father's library."
- Nice.
- "Thomas Henson was against the idea, partly because his financial means had declined, but was talked round by his wife and gave his consent."
- Also well written. The rest of the section is fine. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 10:13, 19 July 2024 (UTC)
All Souls
edit- No complaints here. Two standout sentences, especially the second. are:
Aware that his quick tongue could lead him into indiscretion, he adopted and maintained all his life the practice of writing out his lectures and sermons in full beforehand rather than improvising or speaking from concise notes.[22] He preferred a quill pen, and wrote in a fine clear hand; he considered illegible writing to be a form of bad manners as tiresome as inaudible talking.
- PS I just remembered: in the previous section do you think St Catherine's College, Oxford#History might serve us better as the wikilink for "unattached student?" Otherwise, I'm done with this section too. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 11:14, 19 July 2024 (UTC)
Ordination and east London
edit- The poverty Henson had seen during his six months in Birkenhead gave him a strong impetus to minister to the poor.[28]
- Do you think a mention of the socioeconomic conditions in Birkenhead in the previous section will help those who might be a little confused by "The?" Fowler&fowler«Talk» 17:50, 19 July 2024 (UTC)
- While in this post he honed his speaking skills in public debates with atheist orators,
- Perhaps "honed his speaking skills further ..." as he was already "a gripping speaker" at All Souls, unless the skills were specific to an atheist opposition?
- He was never physically strong, and his relentless work at Barking put a strain on his physique.
- Would "Never physically strong, his relentless work at Barking put a strain on his physique." make the logical connection with the following sentence easier for the reader?
Westminster
edit- he followed predecessors as willing as he was to court controversy including Henry Hart Milman and Frederic Farrar
- Perhaps: he followed predecessors as willing as he
wasto court controversy, including Henry Hart Milman and Frederic Farrar? But it is possible this is an Americanism.
- Perhaps: he followed predecessors as willing as he
- In October 1902 at Westminster Abbey Henson married Isabella (Ella) Caroline, the only daughter of James Wallis Dennistoun of Dennistoun, Scotland.
- No yellow jumper that upon first sighting made young Mandell's eyes widen and heart skip a beat from the other side of the street? One sentence before would help. I understand it was impulsive.
- The marriage was lifelong; there were no children.[34]
- Nice.
- Preaching at Westminster Abbey in 1912 he attracted international attention for naming and denouncing three British directors of the Peruvian-Amazon Company for the "Putumayo atrocities" – the mass enslavement and brutal treatment of indigenous Peruvians in the company's rubber factories.[42]
- Anything in the sources here about cultural anti-slavery DNA he had inherited from Thomas Henson?
- Asquith considered appointing Henson, but decided, as he told the Archbishop of Canterbury, Randall Davidson, that "it would be rather like sending a destroyer into a land-locked pool".[34]
- Observation: There was a brother, Albert (?), a year older, who went into Tea and rose to be the rudest man in Calcutta. There is pugilism-DNA here that might have pre-dated the Plymouth-Brethren-DNA. (James Kirby, in Historians and the Church of England, OUP, 2016, may have called Henson an "ecclesiastical pugilist.") Fowler&fowler«Talk» 19:20, 19 July 2024 (UTC)
- ""Damn it all, man, I am Defender of the Faith!"
- That is funny. Added later. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 01:02, 20 July 2024 (UTC)
Dean and bishop
edit- Among other views for which Henson was known were his disapproval of teetotalism campaigners and of socialism, and for his disbelief in social reform as an ally of religion.
- Should we avoid mixing people and movements; in other words, either say, "Henson was known were his disapproval of teetotalism campaigners and of socialists, and for his disbelief ..." or "Henson was known were his disapproval of teetotalism campaigns and of socialism, and for his disbelief ..." but it is possible that his disapproval was that specific,according to the sources: applied individually to teetotalism campaigners and generally for socialism, not reducible to individual socialists ...
- Also, is this opening sentence thematically more a part of the previous paragraph than the Kikuyu controversy, but to be honest I haven't clicked on it?
- Should we avoid mixing people and movements; in other words, either say, "Henson was known were his disapproval of teetotalism campaigners and of socialists, and for his disbelief ..." or "Henson was known were his disapproval of teetotalism campaigns and of socialism, and for his disbelief ..." but it is possible that his disapproval was that specific,according to the sources: applied individually to teetotalism campaigners and generally for socialism, not reducible to individual socialists ...
- "Gore and his ally Bishop Weston of Zanzibar led the charge, and appear in Henson's journal as"
- Nice.
- Henson spoke out strongly, and ultimately unsuccessfully, against the proposed disestablishment of the Anglican Church in Wales
- Do we want "but ultimately unsuccessfully?" Or even "but unsuccessfully" as success is an end result?
- In doing so he addressed many nonconformist gatherings
- Do we want, "In the course of doing so" as it emphasizes the time period of unsuccessful speeches rather than their fact?
- "A serious doctrinal row within the Church seemed to many to put Henson out of the running for elevation to a bishopric."
- I like this narrative technique, a kind of fronting, or inversion of order, but not of clausal elements but of sentences.
- (Added later. 01:30, 20 July 2024 (UTC)) In some ways, the marriage sentences are similar, but I feel they might be better served with a one sentence context, even if it comes after the announcement.
- I like this narrative technique, a kind of fronting, or inversion of order, but not of clausal elements but of sentences.
- He was, as most of his critics failed, or refused, to notice, doctrinally orthodox on the resurrection, and content to accept the tradition of the virgin birth,
- This is very well written, but, in order to tread cautiously, do we want "many of his critics?"
- Stopping for the day. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 01:02, 20 July 2024 (UTC)
- This is very well written, but, in order to tread cautiously, do we want "many of his critics?"
- Davidson stated publicly that no fair-minded man could read consecutively a series of Henson's sermons without feeling that they had in him a brilliant and powerful teacher of the Christian faith
- The adverb "consecutively" is in end position (after the verb) in the clause. Normally, it could come before the object (a series of Henson's sermons) if the object is a long string of words. Here it is borderline, i.e.: "Davidson stated publicly that no fair-minded man could read
consecutivelya series of Henson's sermonsconsecutively
without feeling that they had in him a brilliant and powerful teacher of the Christian faith" sounds fine to me. But its not a big deal. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 14:24, 20 July 2024 (UTC) - Against Davidson's advice for caution,
- Nice
- Davidson wanted Thomas Strong, Dean of Christ Church, to be appointed and pressed his claims on Lloyd George, but the prime minister took the view that the area needed Henson's practical skills and common touch rather than Strong's academic scholarship
- Very well written. Done with this section. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 14:45, 20 July 2024 (UTC)
Durham
edit- Henson was translated to Durham – England's most senior diocese after Canterbury, York and London[78] – in October 1920.[79] The appointment was challenging: the area was in grave economic difficulty, with the important coal-mining industry in a crisis caused by falling industrial demand for coal in the years after the First World War.
- Should we change "the area" to "the Durham area?" For a split second as I read on, I was uncertain about what "area" had referred to. If the area referred to was larger, district, county, then it should probably be clarified. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 11:43, 21 July 2024 (UTC)
- Ecclesiastically there was potential for friction, as the Dean of Durham, James Welldon, who had once been a diocesan bishop himself,[n 10]
- I'm guessing the reader is probably left guessing what significance "who had once been a diocesan bishop himself," holds here. Are we hinting that he was unhappy at being overlooked, perhaps? Fowler&fowler«Talk» 12:13, 21 July 2024 (UTC)
- was temperamentally and politically at odds with his new superior, given to making public statements that Henson found infuriating.
- ",
and
given to" perhaps? Fowler&fowler«Talk» 12:13, 21 July 2024 (UTC)
- ",
- Welldon, in Henson's view, "could neither speak with effect nor be silent with dignity".[81]
- "view" should probably be spelled out. A reader might be left wondering whether the remarks were made in Welldon's presence, published by Henson and read by Welldon during the latter's lifetime, or written after Welldon's death, for they seems harsh. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 12:13, 21 July 2024 (UTC)
- They clashed on several occasions, most conspicuously when Welldon, a strong admirer of prohibition, publicly criticised Henson's tolerant views on the consumption of alcohol.[82]
- I'm thinking: "and how did Henson reply?" Fowler&fowler«Talk» 12:13, 21 July 2024 (UTC)
- Relations between the deanery and Auckland Castle, the bishop's official residence, improved markedly in April 1933 when Cyril Alington, the Head Master of Eton from 1917 to 1933, succeeded Welldon.[83] Alington was almost universally loved, and though he and Henson differed on points of ecclesiastical practice, they remained warm friends.
- Why the relations had improved was perhaps explained too late in the sentence, and what happened to Welldon? (Did he become a Bishop somewhere, e.g.?). Do you think,
"Upon Welldon's retirement in 1933, relations between the deanery and Auckland Castle ..."
might be more informative, also straightforward? Fowler&fowler«Talk» 12:13, 21 July 2024 (UTC)
- Why the relations had improved was perhaps explained too late in the sentence, and what happened to Welldon? (Did he become a Bishop somewhere, e.g.?). Do you think,
- At the beginning of Henson's episcopate most Durham miners were on strike. He got on well with miners individually and conversed with many of them as they walked through the extensive grounds of Auckland Castle.[4]
- There could be a slight cognitive leap for the reader here after "strike." Getting along well very likely emerged in the course of the walk throughs. Do you think,
"were on strike. He engaged them by inviting them to walk through the extensive grounds of Auckland Castle, conversed with many, and got along well with them individually."
might be more complete? Fowler&fowler«Talk» 13:28, 21 July 2024 (UTC)
- There could be a slight cognitive leap for the reader here after "strike." Getting along well very likely emerged in the course of the walk throughs. Do you think,
- Friction arose from Henson's belief that strikes were morally wrong because of the harm they did to other working people,[86] and he had, in Grimley's words, "a violent, almost obsessional", dislike of trade unions.[4]
- As we are still on the topic of the strike (I think), what do you think of: "
But in the collective discussions, friction (arose/did arise) from Henson's belief that strikes were morally wrong because of the harm they did to other working people?
" Fowler&fowler«Talk» 13:28, 21 July 2024 (UTC)
- As we are still on the topic of the strike (I think), what do you think of: "
- His early concern for the welfare of the poor remained unchanged, but he regarded socialism and trade unionism as negations of individuality.
- This sentence now buttresses the previous (I feel). Fowler&fowler«Talk» 13:28, 21 July 2024 (UTC)
- For the same reason he was against state provision of social welfare, though a strong advocate of voluntary spending on it.
- Not sure we need "for the same reason." Very likely the reader will infer the logic if we write, "
Henson also opposed state provision of social welfare, though he was a strong advocate of voluntary spending on it."
Fowler&fowler«Talk» 13:28, 21 July 2024 (UTC)- PS Forgot to mention here too that I'm stopping for a couple of hours. Fowler&fowler«Talk» 13:42, 21 July 2024 (UTC)