Article: Roger Federer
Strengths:
Very thorough, relevant information on Federer, his tennis career, accomplishments, and all things relating to these three.
Relatively concise on facts presented in article; no over-bloated paragraphs or facts, they are straight and to the point.
Well structured; chronologically for life, career, and achievements, organized in an easy to read, intuitive way.
Weaknesses:
Although relatively concise, this is an article about an incredibly well accomplished tennis player, and legend; as such it is very long.
Information contained in this article is relevant to Federer and his life, but many of the viewers of this article, myself included, will be focused entirely and only on his tennis achievements and career.
What I Added:
i added information under Federer's Legacy section about his achievements on the Olympics, despite him not doing as well as many thought he should have. I did this because it is part of his legacy that he has earned Olympic medals, despite under performing there. I have also added a picture of Federer's "tweener" shot against Djokovic in a match point because I thought it would be good to add another example of his famous shots. I believe this was removed for copyright issues for the picture. I also corrected egregious errors in his personal life section and others.
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