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Black Matriarchy

Negativity in Black Matriarchy

Some will disagree with the idea of a Black Matriarchy because they see Black Matriarchy being used in a derogatory way. The author of the article "The Myth of the Black Matriarchy" argues that black women were seen in a threatening way and their position in the family has resulted in the psychological castration of the black male and has produced a variety of other negative effects. These negative effects include low educational achievements, personality disorders, juvenile delinquency, etc.

Effects Of Abscence of Fathers

The father, in the family structure is the foundation of that family system. The father should provide stability to the family which keeps the family in order and functioning. Its shown in a study by Don Lemon that about 67% of black children are living in a household without their father. Father's play an emotional role in families, and their abscence can be detrimental to the development of their children. For young girls the abscence of their father's can influence how promiscous the daughter is with her physical sexuality. Also they may seek more attention from men and tend to have had more physical contact with boys then other girls their age. Its been shown that boys without fathers tend to become gang affilated more than those who have a two parent home. In the oral survey the writer conducted with 25 black males ages 15 to 25 who had either been to jail, or on probation, or had a criminal record or had criminal charges 13 pending, it was found that 21 out of the 25 subjects were raised by a single mother. Seventeen of them said they thought iftheir fathers were there, it could have made a difference in their lives.

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Organized? Sensible order? Chronologically?

You paragraphs are good and contain great information – I would just change up the sentence structure to help it flow better and help bring the paragraph together

UNDER NEGATIVITY IN BLACK MATRIARCHY • Take out the comma behind the word because in the first sentence • The second sentence under Negativity in Black Matriarchy – add more or combine with third sentence and forth sentence o Black women were seen as a threat; therefore, their position in the family resulted in many negative effects from the black male in the family. Some of the negative effects include psychological castration, low education achievements, personality disorders, and juvenile delinquency.

UNDER EFFECTS OF ABSENCE OF FATHERS • Take out first sentence • Second sentence – Try to make it flow better – o The family structure begins with the father serving as the foundation of the family system. • Third sentence: o Since Father’s play and emotional role in the family, their absence be detrimental to the development of their children. • Fifth sentence: o Change the word then to than • Sixth sentence: o Change more than those to – compared to those • Seventh sentence: o A little confusing and wordy o I would add a sentence before you start saying the results or say: • The results of a oral survey were out of 25 black males who ranged from the age 21-25 ……

NEUTRAL? • “Some people disagree….” o This can be seen as non-neutral so need to add a more specific source that says this

External Links There isn’t a section for external links What you need to do is • Highlight the word or words you want to click on to bring you to a website • Go to the top of the page and hit the word cite • Then click manual • Then click website

Atalbo6 (talk) 13:22, 17 March 2016 (UTC)