User:Avrillarios/Health in Nicaragua/AB.cal Peer Review
Peer review
Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects: LeadGuiding questions:
ContentGuiding questions:
Tone and BalanceGuiding questions:
Sources and ReferencesGuiding questions:
OrganizationGuiding questions:
Images and MediaGuiding questions: If your peer added images or media
For New Articles OnlyIf the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.
Overall impressionsGuiding questions:
Examples of good feedbackA good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.
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General info
edit- Whose work are you reviewing?
Avrillarios
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- User:Avrillarios/Health in Nicaragua
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- Health in Nicaragua
Evaluate the drafted changes
editThe lead section of the original article was definitely lacking in introductory quality; the additions do a good job of framing the rest of the topics covered by the article! However at times the tone seems to sway away from neutral (or into an essay-voice), especially in the phrase "a complex and intricate challenge". There is also new information mentioned in both the new and suggested content that doesn't appear in the rest of the article; I would suggest adding these elsewhere and only briefly referring to them in the lead. There is also no source for the final added statement (about infrastructure exacerbating health issues), which makes it seem like the article is making a claim instead of presenting neutral facts (but maybe linking another Wikipedia article serves this purpose, as has been done).