Template talk:Did you know nominations/Aile Asszonyi
Latest comment: 1 year ago by Storye book in topic Hook modifications
Hook modifications
edit- ... that in Strauss's Elektra, Aile Asszonyi was said to be convincing as a woman close to madness? [2023-05-30 at 09:52:13, by Ravenpuff]
- ... that Aile Asszonyi was said to be convincing as a woman close to madness in Strauss's Elektra? [2023-05-30 at 09:52:40, by Ravenpuff]
GalliumBot (talk • contribs) (he/it) 10:25, 30 May 2023 (UTC)
- Sorry, I do not accept the above modification, because the syntax is weaker. Compare, for example: "In the Capitol, there was a riot in which some people died", to "There was a riot in which some people died, in the Capitol". The first ends in a powerful climax, with emphasis on the last word. The second ends on a weak note, because "died" should have been put at the end, but the end is just context. So please undo that change. Thank you. Storye book (talk) 08:29, 1 June 2023 (UTC)