Template:Did you know nominations/Wide Awake (Katy Perry song)

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The result was: promoted by Carabinieri (talk) 13:21, 19 May 2012 (UTC)

Wide Awake (Katy Perry song)

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• ... that the 3D music video for "Wide Awake" was directed by Tony T. Datis and will be used as a tie-in promotion for the 2012 documentary-concert film, Katy Perry: Part of Me as part of her deal with Pepsi?

Created/expanded by (CA)Giacobbe (talk), Teman13 (talk). Nominated by Teman13 (talk) at 21:52, 11 May 2012 (UTC)

• - Length, date, source and hook all check out. May be good to create an article for Tony T. Datis in the future. (Otherwise, Datis could be left out of the hook if it needs to be shortened). Nice article. Scanlan (talk) 16:26, 13 May 2012 (UTC)

• As the hook is too long at 203 characters, I've struck it out and supplied a couple of alternates below: one that removes Datis as suggested above, another that strikes the Pepsi clause, which comes across as advertising for the brand (hooks frequently get edited after promotion to remove perceived advertising), and a third which eliminates them both and is snappier (short is usually best). Other alternates can be created instead of these, which are only suggestions; a completely different approach can be taken.

• ALT1: ... that the 3D music video for "Wide Awake" will be used as a tie-in promotion for the 2012 documentary-concert film, Katy Perry: Part of Me as part of her deal with Pepsi?
• ALT2: ... that the 3D music video for "Wide Awake" was directed by Tony T. Datis and will be used as a tie-in promotion for the 2012 documentary-concert film, Katy Perry: Part of Me?
• ALT3: ... that the 3D music video for "Wide Awake" will be used as a tie-in promotion for the 2012 documentary-concert film, Katy Perry: Part of Me? —BlueMoonset (talk) 12:33, 15 May 2012 (UTC)
• - Any of these shorter hooks sould be used. I would suggest either ALT 1 or ALT 3, as I hinted at in my original review, since directed Tony T. Datis doesn't have an article yet. Sorry to miss the 3 extra characters. Scanlan (talk) 11:29, 19 May 2012 (UTC)