Template:Did you know nominations/Victoria Joyce Ely

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:34, 19 December 2015 (UTC)

Victoria Joyce Ely

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Created by SusunW (talk). Nominated by Yoninah (talk) at 00:06, 1 December 2015 (UTC).

  • Article is long, new, and within policy. I would prefer that the line, "compared to more than 3,000 "granny midwives" working in the state" be removed since I think do not have a relation to the main hook. Hook is cited in the article. QPQ needed by nominator. --carlojoseph14 (talk) 01:49, 2 December 2015 (UTC)
  • Hi @Carlojoseph14: thanks for undertaking this review. The QPQ can be seen in the line Reviewed, above. With all the Women in Science hooks coming in during the editathon, we're trying to write more than "she was the first". What do you think about:
  • ALT1: ... that of the more than 3,000 midwives working in the state of Florida in the early 1920s, Victoria Joyce Ely was the only one who was trained and licensed? Yoninah (talk) 11:42, 2 December 2015 (UTC)
The ALT1 hook is better and cited. Good to go. --carlojoseph14 (talk) 01:48, 7 December 2015 (UTC)