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The result was: promoted by Miyagawa (talk) 13:57, 27 October 2012 (UTC)
Tristan Clemons edit
... that Australian field hockey goalkeeper Tristan Clemons is developing research to find a cure for cancer?
- Reviewed: Smash (The Offspring album)
Created/expanded by LauraHale (talk), Riley Huntley (talk). Nominated by Riley Huntley (talk) at 19:57, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
Date if creation is Ocotber 21, article is 1858 characters long, hook is 105, ninemsn ref seems fine for it, no copyvio/neutrality issues. Good to go. Lajbi Holla @ me • CP 15:55, 24 October 2012 (UTC)
I have problems with the hook. Clemons isn't developing research to find a cure for cancer, he's directly researching nanoparticles and a way to deliver them for targeted medical (drug) therapies: cancer is one application (and naturally the one picked up by a newspaper), but central nervous system damage seems to be the central one being investigated based on the university source. Saying his research is "to find a cure for cancer" is stretching things; besides, it's even more intriguing to bring nanotechnologies or nanoparticles in, especially since his research is specifically on nanoparticles. BlueMoonset (talk) 22:51, 24 October 2012 (UTC)
ALT1 ... that Australian field hockey goalkeeper Tristan Clemons is developing research to using nanotechnology that may lead to finding a cure for cancer?
Alternative proposed. --LauraHale (talk) 23:54, 25 October 2012 (UTC)
- I did a little editing of the key sentence in the article, and have a different ALT to suggest that avoids the "developing research" wording:
- ALT2 ... that Australian field hockey goalkeeper Tristan Clemons is researching nanoparticles that could treat injuries and fight cancer? —BlueMoonset (talk) 00:39, 26 October 2012 (UTC)
Independent reviewer needed to approve hook. Thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 15:11, 26 October 2012 (UTC)
- I also agree to ALT2. Lajbi Holla @ me • CP 15:52, 26 October 2012 (UTC)
