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The result was: promoted by Theleekycauldron (talk) 10:14, 5 September 2022 (UTC)

Siege of Wark (1138)

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... that despite a truce David I was allowed to continue the siege of Wark? Source: To continue the siege, he explicitly got Wark exempted from the peace terms he signed with King Stephen that autumn.
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Created by CSJJ104 (talk). Self-nominated at 21:35, 25 August 2022 (UTC).

ALT1 ... that despite a truce the siege of Wark was allowed to continue?

Adding ALT1 as possibly a better way to phrase the fact. CSJJ104 (talk) 02:21, 26 August 2022 (UTC)

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Interesting:

QPQ: Done.

Overall: A splendid article, I have only some minor issues with some of the sentences which I don't understand (as a non-native speaker): who renounced his fealty to Stephen and declared for Matilda. Is this supposed to mean he declared fealty for Mathilda? Casualties were high among the attackers before David left two barons to blockade the castle. This can be read like casualties were high early because David did not think of leaving barons there earlier. It's probably supposed to mean because casualties were high, David "didn't try too hard" and only left some barons there to keep up the siege. Could you rephrase that? I don't have the sources so I'm unsure if I got it right. The fall of Wark, along with Norham and Alnwick castles, This isn't clear: Did the other two castles also fall, or were they instead conquered? Both options could be read here; please clarify. Tbh not really a reason to block this, it will certainly pass, but I'd be happy if you could adress these minor issues :) --LordPeterII (talk) 13:21, 3 September 2022 (UTC)

@LordPeterII: Thanks for pointing out those issues, and I can see the potential confusion. I've updated those sections now and hopefully they are clearer now, let me know what you think. CSJJ104 (talk) 15:53, 3 September 2022 (UTC)

@CSJJ104: Yes, that's better.

Approving. I prefer ALT1, but since both are accurate I won't strike ALT0 if the promoter prefers it. (btw please don't mind the new signature, it's still me) –LordPickleII (talk) 16:33, 3 September 2022 (UTC)