Template:Did you know nominations/Sang Penari

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The result was: promoted by Allen3 talk 13:15, 30 January 2012 (UTC)

Sang Penari

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Created/expanded by Crisco 1492 (talk). Self nom at 15:47, 12 January 2012 (UTC)

This looks good except for one or two issues, firstly, that it describes communist "provocations" which are not supported by the source, and secondly, that it somewhat euphemistically describes the anticommunist purges as "killings". You may want to rephrase these statements. Gatoclass (talk) 16:51, 28 January 2012 (UTC)
Verified. Gatoclass (talk) 04:21, 30 January 2012
Also, I have tweaked the hook a little as it's only the third Indonesian film to deal with the killings, not just the third film. Gatoclass (talk) 04:30, 30 January 2012 (UTC)
  • Sounds good, thanks for the review. Crisco 1492 (talk) 08:07, 30 January 2012 (UTC)