Template:Did you know nominations/Sajida Zaidi, Zahida Zaidi

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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 21:34, 1 May 2016 (UTC)

Sajida Zaidi, Zahida Zaidi

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Created by Nvvchar (talk). Self-nominated at 13:43, 8 April 2016 (UTC).

  • The articles were both new when nominated and long-enough. The sources are all accessible and check out. I would say there is no close paraphrasing, although I was uncertain about one paragraph in Zahida Zaidi. I am also not sure about the purpose of the Appreciation section of that article. It does not appear to have any encyclopedic value. The hook assumes that the reader already knows who Sajida was, but Sajida too is supposed to be in the did-you-know part. How about
  • Surtsicna Thanks for the review. Your ALT1suggestion is much better.Nvvchar. 01:47, 14 April 2016 (UTC)
  • I am not sure if I can approve the hook I suggested. Can I? Surtsicna (talk) 19:10, 20 April 2016 (UTC)
  • New reviewer needed to check the ALT1 hook; I've struck the original hook. BlueMoonset (talk) 04:21, 23 April 2016 (UTC)

ALT1 verified in source. Inline reference at end of sentence in articles. Good To Go.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:25, 23 April 2016 (UTC)

  • @Nvvchar: I keep coming by to promote this, as we really need non-US bios to fill out the prep sets. But your articles all need light copyediting to bring them up to form. What are "long years" (in the first paragraph of Sajida Zaidi)? Why are you using "covered" as the verb for literary contributions instead of "included" (in the first paragraph of Zahida Zaidi)? It would preferable for you to take an extra day to smooth out your writing before promoting your articles. Yoninah (talk) 11:51, 1 May 2016 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the suggestions, @Yoninah:. I have corrected issues mentioned by you. I have also copy edited the articles.Nvvchar. 14:29, 1 May 2016 (UTC)
  • Thank you. I still ended up spending a lot of time polishing these up ... Yoninah (talk) 21:31, 1 May 2016 (UTC)