Template:Did you know nominations/Royal Regalia Building Museum
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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 23:52, 20 December 2015 (UTC)
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Royal Regalia Building Museum edit
A decorated chariot used for the procesion
... that the Royal Regalia Building Museum has a profusion of exhibits (pictured) related to the commemorations of the 25 years of Sultan Hassanal Bolkiah's rule of Brunei?
Created by Nvvchar (talk). Self-nominated at 13:26, 28 November 2015 (UTC).
This article is new enough and long enough. I have copyedited the article to remove some non-neutral wording. I do not believe the hook is correct, or at least the sentence in the lead which supports it is unreferenced. According to the Rough Guide source, the museum concerns the sultan's life rather than the commemorations of the 25 years of his rule. You could instead use ALT1
- ALT1 ... that the Royal Regalia Building Museum exhibits include the golden hand and forearm that the Sultan of Brunei used to prop up his chin during his coronation? Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:52, 15 December 2015 (UTC)
- Cwmhiraeth Thank for the review. I agree to your ALT1 hook suggestion.Nvvchar. 07:33, 15 December 2015 (UTC)
Reviewer needed for ALT1. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:54, 15 December 2015 (UTC)
ALT1 at 162 char is below maximum and verified with citation at the end of the sentence. It's interesting ... guess the crown was heavy? Minor copyedit to make text more neutral, fully cited in-line and no apparent copyvios. Did not review items verified by previous reviewer, though note that the Borneo Bulletin Brunei Yearbook snippet view confirms the exhibit was established for the silver jubilee, (25-year anniversary of the coronation), which is now cited in the text. SusunW (talk) 06:59, 20 December 2015 (UTC)