Template:Did you know nominations/Ronald Ngala

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The result was: promoted by Crisco 1492 (talk) 06:02, 11 September 2011 (UTC)

Ronald Ngala edit

Created/expanded by Pi (talk). Self nom at 13:53, 29 August 2011 (UTC)

  • Generally o.k. but some of the assertions need cited sources, preferably online. Aymatth2 (talk) 00:54, 9 September 2011 (UTC)
The book sources are actually all available on google books online if that helps. Is there any particular claim that is problematic? Pi (Talk to me!) 00:36, 10 September 2011 (UTC)
There is no requirement or even preference for using online sources. However, there is a requirement for at least one inline reference in every paragraph. At present, the short "Early career" and "Post-independence" sections are uncited. Also, extraordinary claims should be cited, and in my opinion the "controversial press statement declaring Kenya's Lyttelton constitution" and "refused to form any government until Jomo Kenyatta was released from house arrest" fall in that category. Rlendog (talk) 01:22, 10 September 2011 (UTC)
If a source is online, I would to add the url to the citation - easier for reviewers. I have added some citations, but there are still a couple of statements that could use a source, which I flagged. Not that they seem unlikely, more on general principal. Aymatth2 (talk) 02:20, 10 September 2011 (UTC)
I've added a couple of sources, one for the election results and one for one of the claims flagged above. I didn't add the sentence about his death and am not sure what the source was for that, however I am pretty sure that the claim about the constitution was in Aseka, however I can't access the book right now to find the page. Pi (Talk to me!) 18:04, 10 September 2011 (UTC)
  • It all looks fine to me now, hook, length, sources etc. But I made enough changes to count as biased. Maybe someone else could take a look. Aymatth2 (talk) 19:39, 10 September 2011 (UTC)
  • Paraphrasing and whatnot check out. Referencing is fine. Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:53, 11 September 2011 (UTC)