Template:Did you know nominations/Petros Lanztas

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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 20:15, 29 August 2018 (UTC)

Petros Lantzas edit

  • ... that Greek spy, Petros Lantzas, devised in 1608 an assassination plan against the Ottoman Sultan by presenting in front of him a fake present? Source: Safa, Gürkan, Emrah (2012). Espionage in the 16th Century Mediterranean Secret Diplomy, Mediterranean go-betweens and the Ottoman Habsburg Rivalry (Thesis). Georgetown University. p. 12. Similarly, the Corphiote Pietro Lanza served the Viceroys of Naples for many years as a corsair and spy. After many years in service, he even offered, at a very old age, an interesting plan, worthy of the caliber of this seasoned corsair. He would go to Constantinople and engage in a number of clandestine operations including the assasination of the Ottoman Sultan with a fake present in whose lower part there would be explosives.{{cite thesis}}: CS1 maint: multiple names: authors list (link)

Created by Alexikoua (talk). Self-nominated at 09:54, 1 August 2018 (UTC).

  • Article wise: It's new, long enough. The hook is okay in terms of length and content, though including the word "explosives" somewhere would have made the hook more interesting. QPQ is good.
Just one issue: The phrase "...Ottoman Sultan with a fake present in whose lower part there would be explosives" in the article is ad verbatim from the source, which makes me uncomfortable. Perhaps this sentence could use a rewrite? - Mailer Diablo 13:54, 15 August 2018 (UTC)
  • Also, is it Petros Lanztas or Petros Lantzas? - Mailer Diablo 13:57, 15 August 2018 (UTC)
I agree that it will be much more interesting for the reader to have the explosion in the hook, what about this small addition:
  • ALT1: ... that Greek spy, Petros Lantzas, devised in 1608 an assassination plan against the Ottoman Sultan by presenting in front of him a fake present which would contain explosives?
"presenting in front of him a fake present" is awkward and not very idiomatic: "placing a present containing explosives in front of him" may be better. You present "to" not "in front of". Johnbod (talk) 13:35, 26 August 2018 (UTC)
  • Looks good to me now. The sources I went through were particular interesting to read. - Mailer Diablo 08:38, 29 August 2018 (UTC)