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The result was: promoted by BlueMoonset (talk) 23:22, 4 October 2012 (UTC)

Mostafa Hussein Kamel

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Created/expanded by Activism1234 (talk). Self nom at 04:30, 4 September 2012 (UTC)

  • Shouldn't the question mark be outside the quotes? Otherwise, it looks good. Abyssal (talk) 14:38, 19 September 2012 (UTC)
  • Shoud be good to go, then. Abyssal (talk) 16:17, 20 September 2012 (UTC)
  • I am concerned that some of the phrasing used by this article may be too close to that of its sources. Compare for example "some environmentalists have actually proposed to dismantle the ministry, considering it to be harmful to the environment" vs "Some environmentalists now propose that Egypt should actually do away with the ministry of environment altogether, claiming it to be harmful to the environment". Nikkimaria (talk) 01:23, 22 September 2012 (UTC)
    • Yeah that's too close. Abyssal (talk) 01:38, 22 September 2012 (UTC)

I think that my new edit has fixed it. Can you please take a look again? Thanks. --Activism1234 00:48, 25 September 2012 (UTC)

But that was only an example, as I mentioned – the other sources ought to be checked. On a quick look FN5 is also problematic: "Kamel visited nature reserves in the southern Sinai Peninsula to hear workers' demands and complaints, as part of an effort to overhaul nature reserves, which will then be run by an independent body affiliated with the Egyptian Environmental Affairs Ministry" vs "Kamel paid a surprise visit to nature reserves in South Sinai to listen to workers' demands and complaints. The visit is part of efforts aimed at overhauling nature reserves, which will be run by an independent body to be an affiliate of the Environmental Affairs Ministry". Nikkimaria (talk) 03:30, 25 September 2012 (UTC)
I've changed that passage as well. --Activism1234 03:49, 25 September 2012 (UTC)
The Wikipedia article says the guy is "a geophysicist by profession", which is an exact quote from the cited source. Activism, you need to make some major changes here, if not a rewrite of the whole article. Abyssal (talk) 15:29, 2 October 2012 (UTC)
I've fixed that one. Are there any other issues? --Activism1234 00:19, 3 October 2012 (UTC)
Looks good finally. Abyssal (talk) 15:38, 4 October 2012 (UTC)
Great! --Activism1234 16:01, 4 October 2012 (UTC)
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