Template:Did you know nominations/Limpa bread

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:36, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

Limpa bread

  • Reviewed: I'm new to DYK

Created by Spudlace (talk). Self-nominated at 05:01, 29 September 2020 (UTC).

  • Hi Spudlace, welcome to DYK! Your article is new enough, long enough, neutrally written, well referenced, and no close paraphrasing seen. However, the references need to be formatted with dates and publication information; see WP:Citation templates. It would be nice to add an image to the article; have you taken one yourself, or found one on Flickr?
  • The hooks are not really "hooky" – they are just statements of fact. Adding a little more detail to your article, or using creative wording in the hook, will help. No QPQ needed for nominator with less than 5 DYK credits. Yoninah (talk) 15:08, 29 September 2020 (UTC)
  • Yoninah Thank you for the review. I'll do the templates tonight and I see that you've already added a photo. About the hook - I thought the second one was more "hooky" than the first, although perhaps a better hook for wort than for limpa. Would this be better:
    • ALT2: ...that limpa bread is also called vörtlimpa? Spudlace (talk) 19:16, 29 September 2020 (UTC)
  • Most readers will have no idea what you're talking about. Can you add any more interesting detail from your sources, which would help you find an interesting angle for the hook? Yoninah (talk) 19:19, 29 September 2020 (UTC)
  • I think it's interesting that it was leavened with wort which is not a common way to leaven breads anymore. Let me see what else I can find. Spudlace (talk) 19:28, 29 September 2020 (UTC)
  • So you could add more to that hook, like:
  • ALT1a: ... that limpa bread, a sweet Scandinavian staple, was historically leavened with fermented brewer's wort? -- (the part about being a Scandinavian staple is not mentioned or sourced in the article, but you could add that or any other identifying phrase). Yoninah (talk) 19:48, 29 September 2020 (UTC)
The SDSU extension paper says it 'must always be included' in the Christmas smorgasbord served in Scandinavian homes (not just Swedish). We could change it to:
  • ALT1b: ... that limpa, a sweet Scandinavian rye bread, was historically leavened with fermented brewer's wort? Spudlace (talk) 21:06, 29 September 2020 (UTC)
  • That's good. Please provide cites for Scandinavian and sweet (or maybe: sweet and spicy). Yoninah (talk) 21:32, 29 September 2020 (UTC)
  • No. Add them as inline cites to the article. Do you like "sweet and spicy" in the hook? Yoninah (talk) 21:51, 29 September 2020 (UTC)
I like "sweet Scandinavian spice bread", there are sources for "spice bread" or "spice loaf" that I added as inline cites to the article. Spudlace (talk) 22:02, 29 September 2020 (UTC)
Sorry, your first line is going off in a new direction. Limpa is a Scandinavian rye bread. It is sweetened with brown sugar, etc., and has the addition of spices. Yoninah (talk) 22:05, 29 September 2020 (UTC)
Better? The inline cite for spice loaf is in the ingredients section. Does it also need an IC in the lede?. Spudlace (talk) 22:24, 29 September 2020 (UTC)
  • Thank you, everything looks good now. You can pull hook facts from different parts of your article, as long as each is cited. ALT1b hook refs verified and cited inline. ALT1b good to go. Yoninah (talk) 22:29, 29 September 2020 (UTC)