- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 13:58, 18 October 2016 (UTC)
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Lily Chitty
edit- ... that Lily Chitty was an art student at the start of World War I, became a secretary, and ended the war as a farmer?
- ALT1:... that the archaeologist Lily Chitty was a Land Girl during the First World War?
Created by Gaia Octavia Agrippa (talk). Self-nominated at 21:51, 12 October 2016 (UTC).
Nice article, interesting person! Thanks for writing it. It's new enough, long enough, mostly within policy (see below); hook is short and information is neutral and supported by sources.
- I found a couple of unsourced statements: e.g. "he married fellow archaeologist Mary Kitson Clark in 1943". I can tell which parts of the Oxford bio you're trying to rewrite: I would recommend giving the article another read through and rephrasing some of the closer paraphrasing, e.g. "the lectures and excursions of the learned societies to which she belonged" could become something like "the activities of the learned societies of which she was a member".
- Regarding the hooks, I prefer ALT1 but note that the language used is not the same as in the article; I'm familiar with the terms but readers may not know that a "Land Girl" was someone who served in the "Women's Land Army". Making this explicit would be a minor fix. Similarly ALT mentions her being a farmer, but the article doesn't explain that that's what the "Women's Land Army" was doing. QPQ remains to be done. Mary Mark Ockerbloom (talk) 03:27, 15 October 2016 (UTC)
- Thank you for the review. I have made the changes that you have suggested, included adding a sentence to explain the Land Girls/Women's Land Army. I am doing the QPQ too. Gaia Octavia Agrippa Talk 13:42, 15 October 2016 (UTC)
Nice elaboration, I see the QPQ is being done. Mary Mark Ockerbloom (talk) 17:21, 16 October 2016 (UTC)
- @Gaia Octavia Agrippa: I've taken the liberty of adding a link for Land Girl to ALT1. Remove if you dislike. Mary Mark Ockerbloom (talk) 18:50, 17 October 2016 (UTC)