Template:Did you know nominations/Harold St George Gray

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The result was: promoted by Allen3 ^talk 10:08, 6 May 2015 (UTC)

Harold St George Gray edit

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... that the archaeologist Harold St George Gray undertook excavations at Avebury from 1908 to 1923?

Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Boite (river)

Created by Rodw (talk). Self-nominated at 09:00, 27 April 2015 (UTC).

Article is new enough, long enough, well sourced enough. Close paraphrasing seems not a concern due to the structure of the article and its sourcing. Hook is wholly and totally inadequate. We might say that a butcher worked cutting up and selling pork from some date to some other date in some place, and that would be just as interesting or hooky. What is surprising about this? Find a better hook. Arthur goes shopping (talk) 23:56, 29 April 2015 (UTC)

Not many archaeologists have a key role in a single excavation for 15 years however, how about:
ALT1

... that Harold St George Gray was one of the first archaeologists to make three dimensional models?

The source cited does not quite say that. How about:

ALT2 ... that Harold St George Gray was involved in the dismissal of another archaeologist whose work relied on information provided by the spirits of dead Glastonbury monks?

Arthur goes shopping (talk) 09:47, 30 April 2015 (UTC)

I could go with that, however I would add links to Frederick Bligh Bond and Glastonbury Abbey, so would give something like:

ALT3 ... that Harold St George Gray was involved in the dismissal of another archaeologist whose work relied on information provided by the spirits of dead Glastonbury monks?

— Rod ^talk 16:53, 30 April 2015 (UTC)

Might I suggest the following alternative? I've added a line to the article to support it. Prioryman (talk) 14:26, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

ALT4 ... that the archaeologist Harold St George Gray discovered that the 11 m (36 ft) deep ditch surrounding Avebury was dug out of solid chalk using red deer antlers as picks?

Thanks for adding to the article. I would be happy with ALT4 if the reviewer is.— Rod ^talk 15:17, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

Good to go with ALT4. Assuming the hook fact is in the I. Smith source, as it's not in the English Heritage PDF. Arthur goes shopping (talk) 07:31, 2 May 2015 (UTC)