Template:Did you know nominations/Free school movement

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The result was: promoted by Allen3 ^talk 23:46, 5 December 2013 (UTC)

Free school movement edit

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... ~~that almost all of the original free school movement schools were based on Summerhillian philosophy (school pictured)?~~

Reviewed: Sheila Bird

Moved to mainspace by Czar (talk). Self nominated at 01:42, 17 November 2013 (UTC).

The article is new enough (draft moved to main space on 17 November, DYK nomination filed on the same day) and long enough (at 2180 characters). The hook is properly cited; the article is within policy and QPQ has been done. Only thing is, I don't like the hook.

First, the word "school" is used three times, and by "link shadowing" Summerhill School with Summerhillian, the content of the great picture (this very school) is obscured. Secondly (but that's also a problem with the article itself), the geographical link is missing: It should be pointed out that Summerhill School is located in England, and that it was used as a model for schools in America. Then, using the hook source text that "the very small number of free schools which existed in the U.S. before the current wave were almost all explicitly modeled on Summerhill", I would like to suggest

ALT1 ... that almost all of the early free schools in the United States were modeled on Summerhill School in England (pictured)?

Best regards--FoxyOrange (talk) 19:53, 4 December 2013 (UTC)

Okay, thanks. Rephrased hook czar ♔ 02:40, 5 December 2013 (UTC)

For the record, we are no speaking of

ALT2 ... that almost all of the original American free school movement schools were based on the English Summerhill School (pictured)?

The word "school" is still used three times, but don't want to nitpick, so I'm fine with it. I struck the other two suggestions. Good to go!--FoxyOrange (talk) 07:45, 5 December 2013 (UTC)