Template:Did you know nominations/First Landing Party of the Founders of Newark
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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 15:03, 21 May 2019 (UTC)
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First Landing Party of the Founders of Newark edit
- ... that First Landing Party of the Founders of Newark went missing for more than a decade?
- Reviewed: Teide Cableway
Created by Djflem (talk). Self-nominated at 02:10, 20 April 2019 (UTC).
New article, long enough, QPQ is complete, no images to worry about. There are no neutrality issues and the hook fact is sourced; all sources used appear reliable. However, in the "Description and original location" there are several statements which still need inline citations. The first paragraph of that section has been copied and pasted from here, it needs to be rewritten in your own words. A few minor edits needed – the first sentence in the second paragraph is confusing, and there are a few other parts of the article where words have been left out. The hook is fine, but I would suggest making it a little more "grabby" as follows (the weight still needs an inline citation): Ivar the Boneful (talk) 11:59, 20 April 2019 (UTC)
ALT1: ... that a 13,000-pound statue in Newark, New Jersey, went missing for more than a decade?
- @Ivar the Boneful: I think all issues have been addressed. "Landing party missing" hook has a nice twist and is OK. Djflem (talk) 05:47, 21 April 2019 (UTC)
First hook is approved. Nice work on the article Djflem. Could you just fix up the sentence starting "It has been known as the Bridge Memorial..."? I think there's a place name after Passaic River that's been left out, but it's an offline source so I'm not sure what. Ivar the Boneful (talk) 15:59, 21 April 2019 (UTC)
