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The result was: promoted by 97198 (talk) 11:44, 22 December 2018 (UTC)

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Clémentine Touré edit

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Created by Joseph2302 (talk). Self-nominated at 21:02, 30 November 2018 (UTC).

General: Article is new enough and long enough
Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems

Hook eligibility:

  • Cited: Yes
  • Interesting: No - All three hooks are sourced, though you could use "coached" instead of "led" for the ALT1 hook as someone (like myself, initially) might interpret that as being captain instead of a head coach. Of which hook I like most, ALT1, regardless of wording, is my favorite. Playing outside your own continent for the first time would be pretty significant for an Ivorian, especially if you read the references in the article. ALT2 is okay as well, I don't know a lot of countries who are coached by former players, admittedly. The main hook works but doesn't stand out too much. Those are my thoughts, at least.
QPQ: Done.

Overall: Greetings! I wanted to take a look at this article...and it looks pretty good. It does need some minor touch-ups and one medium-sized touch-up. Here's my look through it:

  • 1. Lead: Looks fine to me. Normally, I'd think of three sentences for the lead, but I think two should be fine for an article of this length.
  • 2. Personal life: Other than the word "brother" not being plural, this is a good beginning.
  • 3. Playing career: Everything checks out.
  • 4. Coaching career: Since Koumassi is linked, Treichville should be linked as well, so that readers know where that club is from. Also, the RH Magazine article is correct seems to say she was an assistant at Jeanne d'Arc (I'm using Google Translate for this because my knowledge of French isn't that great), so the infobox should mention this as well. There are precedents for including assistant coaching/managing stints in infoboxes, so it's not a problem to add one here.
    The rest of the coaching area checks out, but I have to be honest in saying that "there were 24 head coaches in total" sounds awkward to me. My only idea that I could think of to word that better is a sentence like "Touré was one of eight female head coaches at the 24-team 2015 World Cup"...but that seems awkward to me as well, unfortunately. I can't think of a way to make the mention of the number of female coaches, the number of coaches/teams, and the event all flow together.
  • Overall, it's a nicely done article on a topic that is very under-represented here on Wikipedia. Once those minor issues are polished off, and once a better way to make mention of the number of coaches/teams comes about, this article will easily earn a green checkmark. Good job. JustJamie820 (talk) 23:38, 1 December 2018 (UTC)
JustJamie820 Changes made as per the comments above. Joseph2302 (talk) 14:22, 2 December 2018 (UTC)
  • Hi Joseph! All of my concerns have been addressed. This gets a now. Well done. -- JustJamie820 (talk) 16:07, 2 December 2018 (UTC)
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