Template:Did you know nominations/Augustus Pierce

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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 21:24, 9 May 2020 (UTC)

Augustus Pierce

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~~... that when Tammany Hall lost control of the New York City Board of Aldermen, the shock caused the death of Tammany Hall politician Augustus Pierce?~~ Source: "So shocked by this unimaginable development was ... Augustus Pierce that he ... clutched his chest and dropped dead as well" [1]

QPQ: Siena Piano, ~~in progress~~ done

Created by John M Wolfson (talk). Self-nominated at 00:54, 15 March 2020 (UTC).

Looks good to go. New at time of nom, 1800 characters, fully cited, policy checks out. Good hook, interesting, source checks out. QPQ verified. No image. Nice work John. CaptainEek ^{Edits Ho Cap'n!}⚓ 05:05, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

Hi, I came by to promote this, but the article does not seem start-class per Rule D7. There is nothing about his early life and no source for his birthdate. Footnote 2 says he was 64 at his death, but you've written his birthdate as circa 1869; why not 1870? Yoninah (talk) 23:37, 18 April 2020 (UTC)

Yoninah, the birthdate is c. 1869 since his death happened in January and it's thus more likely that he didn't reach his 65th birthday. Having said that, I'll see whether anything more on his early life. – John M Wolfson (talk • contribs) 23:41, 18 April 2020 (UTC)

Thank you for checking. Yoninah (talk) 23:42, 18 April 2020 (UTC)

- I couldn't find any more information, sorry. – John M Wolfson (talk • contribs) 19:45, 7 May 2020 (UTC)

@John M Wolfson: I added pages from FamilySearch. Yoninah (talk) 00:42, 8 May 2020 (UTC)

You are a saint, Yoninah! Thanks! – John M Wolfson (talk • contribs) 00:47, 8 May 2020 (UTC)

@John M Wolfson: Thanks. Now, I'm wondering if you could make the hook stronger. As it is, it sounds like he went home and died. It would be more dramatic if you say it happened in the chamber. Yoninah (talk) 12:57, 8 May 2020 (UTC)

How about ALT1: ~~... that when Tammany Hall lost control of the New York City Board of Aldermen, the shock caused the death of Tammany Hall politician Augustus Pierce at the scene?~~ – John M Wolfson (talk • contribs) 23:39, 8 May 2020 (UTC)

Or:
ALT2: ~~... that when the New York City Board of Aldermen voted to end Tammany Hall's three decades of control over it in 1934, Tammany Hall politician Augustus Pierce collapsed and died from the shock?~~ Yoninah (talk) 18:33, 9 May 2020 (UTC)

ALT3:... that when the New York City Board of Aldermen voted to end Tammany Hall's three decades of control over it in 1934, Tammany Hall politician Augustus Pierce collapsed and died in the chambers from ~~the~~ shock? – John M Wolfson (talk • contribs) 20:06, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
Good, let's go with that. Restoring tick per CaptainEek's review. Yoninah (talk) 21:22, 9 May 2020 (UTC)