Template:Did you know nominations/Akashi District, Hyōgo

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:04, 17 June 2016 (UTC)

Akashi District, Hyōgo edit

Created by Athomeinkobe (talk). Self-nominated at 04:20, 16 May 2016 (UTC).

  • New enough, long enough, neutral, inline cited, no copyvios found. AGF on close paraphrasing, since I can't check that against non-English sources. As best I can tell from the machine translation, the hook is cited properly. It's also short enough, interesting, and neutral. I have one small issue with the hook. It's not immediately obvious that Akashi is a town/city based on how it's written. I assumed Akashi was a person at first and was a tad confused. Would you be fine with a slight copyedit to change the ending of the hook to "the city of Akashi left"? ~ RobTalk 07:19, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
Thanks for your review Rob. Excluding the word "city" was an attempt at humour; I first considered omitting the word "District" from the piped link also, but thought that might be taking it too far. I wanted to create intrigue, not confusion. But since confusion is the result, I agree that the change should be made. AtHomeIn神戸 (talk) 07:42, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
@Athomeinkobe: Alternatively, if you wanted to go with humor, we could always throw this in the queue for April Fool's Day hooks next year. You'd be waiting a full year for the credit, though. Completely up to you. ~ RobTalk 08:50, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
@BU Rob13:, sorry for missing your reply. I don't think it is that humourous really, so we can make the change you suggest. AtHomeIn神戸 (talk) 08:08, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
Alright, since I suggested the wording, someone else will need to quickly approve the hook. ~ RobTalk 12:20, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
  • Hook, length and date OK. No close paraphrasing found, AGF Japanese-language sources. Intelligentsium 20:57, 16 June 2016 (UTC)