Talk:Yuuyami Doori Tankentai/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TheJoebro64 (talk · contribs) 22:14, 3 October 2018 (UTC)

This one looks like it's been gathering dust. Doing it JOEBRO64 22:14, 3 October 2018 (UTC)

Comments:

• It... follows a comparable story of Japanese youth exploring paranormal urban legends in their neighborhood. This doesn't really make sense to me—how is it comparable? Also this isn't mentioned in prose.
  • I just removed the word cuz it's not really needed. What I mean is, the story about Japanese youth exploring rumors in their neighborhood is comparable to the narratives in Twilight Syndrome.
• first collecting rumors at the school and then later investigating them in city. Typo—should be "in the city."
  • Done
• IIRC the use of "very" is discouraged, as it's unneeded to express the point (horror was popular and horror games were popular)
  • Done
• ... including some involved with Twilight Syndrome, and decided to develop another horror game borrowing the former series' gameplay system. I don't think "former" is needed here—there's no other series it could be referring to.
  • Done
• Upon release, Famitsu scored it at 26/40. ...and that's it? I feel like you should explain Famitsu's thoughts about the game; looking at the source they're present.
  • I added more. It's too bad Famitsu doesn't post the full reviews.

Just a few issues, otherwise this is a great little read. JOEBRO64 11:43, 5 October 2018 (UTC)

@TheJoebro64: TarkusAB^talk 00:50, 6 October 2018 (UTC)

passeroo JOEBRO64 12:15, 6 October 2018 (UTC)