Talk:You Can Dance/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 04:40, 12 November 2010 (UTC)

GA reviews are a good distraction from studying for exams...

Lead

• The release is not included in the body of the article
  • It is there, in the chart performance section. However a typo was there which I corrected. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 06:34, 12 November 2010 (UTC)
    • Better. I thought it had a different release date or something... Adabow (talk · contribs) 06:56, 12 November 2010 (UTC)

Background

• I recommend a bit more wikifying, including Warner Bros. and the different instruments
  • Did some, take a looky. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 06:34, 12 November 2010 (UTC)

Development

• The transition from musical development into album art in the second paragraph is quite stiff. Break it up or smooth it out somehow.
  • Break added. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 06:34, 12 November 2010 (UTC)
    • It seems more natural to break it up before you mention the album cover (ie after "with only the high-hat left to keep time.")
      • My bad, sorry. I meant to break from that only. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 07:35, 12 November 2010 (UTC)

Composition

• Wouldn't the audio sample be more appropriate here?
  • I agree. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 06:34, 12 November 2010 (UTC)
• "After the first verse, the sound of keyboard is heard during the effect." - link (the?) keyboard, what you have linked to doesn't seem to be right - 'you can hear the keyboard when it is in chorus with other instruments' is the idea I took from the sentence, which doesn't sit quite right. (Or maybe I'm just reading something wrong...)
  • Oops, it should have been [[Chorus effect|chorus]] — Legolas ^(talk2me) 06:34, 12 November 2010 (UTC)
• Link violin
• "According to the sheet music published at SheetMusicPlus.com..." - is this preamble really needed?
  • This was needed as per a discussion at WP:RSN that sheet music should be made a treelink, and the publisher should be included. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 06:34, 12 November 2010 (UTC)
• "...spanning from the notes of C5 to B♭m" now the only musical experience I have is a few months of piano lessons, but C5 and B♭m surely aren't parallel... what I'm trying to say is 'why doesn't B♭m have a number next to it?'
  • The sheet shows B♭5 to it, which I believed was the minor chord. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 07:32, 12 November 2010 (UTC)
    • I hardly know what I'm going on about, so I'll take your worl for it :). Adabow (talk · contribs) 08:35, 12 November 2010 (UTC)
• Link middle eight.
  • linked. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 07:32, 12 November 2010 (UTC)

Critical reception

• "Blender magazine reviewer Tony Power rated it one star..." out of?
• Emphasized. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 07:32, 12 November 2010 (UTC)

Chart performance

• Not sure about these chart positions "reached a peak of 14" - shouldn't there be a 'number' before each position
  • you're right.

Track listing

• Source for writers and producers?
  • Added.

Credits and personnel

• Source?
  • Added.

References

• The Washington Post is published by The Washington Post Company
  • Its common notion to not include the self-publishers for such cases. I was advised by the FA reviewers during promoting Madonna that publications like The New York Times, The Washington Post, BBC etc self-publish their content and hence for them adding the publisher as The New York Times Cmopany, The Washington Post Company is redundant. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 06:34, 12 November 2010 (UTC)
    • That makes sense Adabow (talk · contribs) 06:56, 12 November 2010 (UTC)
      • Done all. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 07:32, 12 November 2010 (UTC)

• Oh, and a dab link

That's it. Pretty good work, I'll place the review on hold now. Adabow (talk · contribs) 06:04, 12 November 2010 (UTC)