Talk:William Hely/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 07:21, 3 June 2013 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 07:21, 3 June 2013 (UTC)

• Punctuate this better: Royal Australian Air Force (RAAF), which did not at that stage have its own officer training college.
  • Hmm, I think it's punctuated correctly, or at least reasonably -- what's your suggestion?
    • I was thinking that "at that stage" should be set off by commas as a subordinate phrase. What do you think? And there needs to be a "yet" in there.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:42, 12 June 2013 (UTC)
      • I see -- I think "at that stage" and "yet" essentially mean the same thing, so how about "which did not yet have its own officer training college"?
        • Good point. Your suggested wording sounds fine.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 04:35, 12 June 2013 (UTC)
          • Okay, done. Tks/cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 07:01, 12 June 2013 (UTC)
• How did a prospector borrow a RAAF Dragon Rapide?
  • Fair question! Actually he was on the plane in his capacity as survey director -- tweaked.
• Which king was Hely an ADC for? And which queen?
  • The sources just said King and Queen, so I linked them instead. If you feel strongly about it, I guess it wouldn't be too OR-ish to spell 'em out -- let me know... ;-)
    • Might as well spell them out because I don't know if the consorts got their own ADCs or not.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:42, 12 June 2013 (UTC)
      • Roger wilco. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 03:53, 12 June 2013 (UTC)
• All pics appropriately licensed.
• No DABs, external links all work, although there are a lot of redirects.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:42, 12 June 2013 (UTC)
  • I'll double-check the ELs in case there's a way to improve them. Tks for review! Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 02:38, 12 June 2013 (UTC)