Talk:White-fronted falconet/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 09:29, 26 August 2022 (UTC)

Happy to review the article.

Review comments

Lead section/infobox

• Does CITES need to be linked twice in the infobox?
  • That's how the template is formatted, can't do anything about that.

Understood. AM

• I have produced a larger-scale map, which can be amended in any way. i would consider replacing the current one 9which provides little information) with this one, (which provides a little more).
  • Done.

1 Taxonomy and systematics

• Introduce Carole Griffiths, perhaps by saying where her team were based.
  • I guess NYC, but not really relevant, is it? I don't really think an introduction can be added, since unlike Sharpe, Griffiths isn't independently notable and I'm just mentioning her because she's the lead author.
• Just checking, but is are further sister grammatically correct here?
  • Yes.

2 Description

• extremely (or perhaps even extremely small) is vague, and seems unnecessary here, given that the measurements are provided.
  • Provides a description in case somebody doesn't know how large a falcon usually is and thus has nothing to compare the given length with.
• by a small amount – providing an actual comparison with another species would help this phrase sound less vague.
  • Source only says "albeit marginally the smallest"
• also 9 per cent larger - ‘9 per cent larger’?
  • I don't see the issue here, do you want % signs instead of the word?

2.1 Vocalisations

• I would put all of the text in this small sub-section into the Description section (see MOS:LINEBREAKS).
  • Done.

3 Distribution and habitat

• but is found is redundant imo.
  • Reworded.

4 Behaviour and ecology

• Consider swapping The white-fronted falconet in the second paragraph with The species in the first, to improve the prose slightly.
  • Done.
• Link preening.
  • Done.

On hold

Most minor issues, easily sorted. I'm putting this interesting little article on hold for a week until 4 September to allow time for the issues raised to be addressed. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 14:33, 27 August 2022 (UTC)

I've replied to all the things you pointed out. AryKun (talk) 14:52, 1 September 2022 (UTC)

Passing now. Amitchell125 (talk) 15:21, 1 September 2022 (UTC)