Talk:Whiskery shark/GA1

Latest comment: 12 years ago by Yzx in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk) 22:42, 29 June 2011 (UTC)Reply

  • I know you're not the biggest fan of categorisation, but... Category:Monotypic animal genera? Category:Animals described in 1943? Category:Fish of Australia?
    • I added the third one. I just don't see the point of the first two at all. What is the encyclopedic value of knowing which animals were described in 1943? That's a completely arbitrary piece of information. You might as well have a Category:Animals with names starting with W.
      • If you feel that the categories are useless then, I implore you, nominate them for deletion. In the mean time, I think it's best to use them on articles where they are appropriate; inconsistency doesn't help anyone. I've added them myself. J Milburn (talk) 11:21, 30 June 2011 (UTC)Reply
  • "Other common names for the whiskery include Mack's whiskery shark, reef shark, shakey shark, and sundowner." Mention that it's in addition to "whiskery shark".
    • Fixed missing word.
  • Maybe it's different in zoology, but are you certain that citation is accurate? The name Furgaleus wasn't used until 1951, but you date the citation as 1943
    • The species was described in 1943 as Fur macki. The current genus name wasn't coined until 1951.
  • Do we know what the genus/species names mean?
    • I don't have access to Whitley's original publication. It might stay a mystery anyway since Whitley had a habit of giving things odd names and not saying why.
  • "There 24–32 upper and 36–42 lower tooth rows" Doesn't make sense
    • Fixed missing word.
  • "oblique with smaller cusplets to the trailing side of the main cusp, while the lower teeth are upright and lack cusplets" Very jargony
    • Rephrased
  • The plural of "octopus" is octopuses, occasionally octopi, or, in British English, octopodes (according to the Oxford English Dictionary
    • Changed
  • "deeper water or other unfished habitat" habitats? another habitat?
    • Changed to "habitats"
  • "it is targeted by a shark fishery operating off Western Australia." Does it have a name?
    • Added
  • "Fisheries Western Australia" What is this? Worthy of a redlink?
    • Changed to the "Western Australian government"; the name of the particular management agency isn't important
  • "has not been" was not? Or is the season not over?
    • Changed to "was not"
  • File:Furgaleus macki distmap.png could do with a link to the base map
    • Added

Very nice. Well written, covers all the bases. Sources are appropriate, illustrations are solid. J Milburn (talk) 23:03, 29 June 2011 (UTC)Reply

Let me know of further issues. -- Yzx (talk) 00:48, 30 June 2011 (UTC)Reply
Looking good; I'm happy to promote. J Milburn (talk) 11:25, 30 June 2011 (UTC)Reply
Thanks for the review. -- Yzx (talk) 15:02, 30 June 2011 (UTC)Reply